Oh baby, it's a shame that you were lip synching
to that song of lies
because as soon as the track skipped
I knew that what we had here was a dying obssesion
There's no such things as fairytales
because that's too out of fashion
[We've titled this our great mistake, our happily nevermore]
I've lain down on this bathroom floor
to watch the lights fade out
as I held you in my arms
[you had a bad trip darling]
you were having a full out frontal war
with our black and white checkered tiles
[by the way if you didn't notice, you lost]
I found you at least three weeks ago underneath
that highway sign
crimson lipstick on your lips
gladly donated from the canister of your nose
[my pretty bloody mess...]
Everything, my love... we've come to know between us
is as fake as the stars
that shimmer across my throat
in an attempt to shine bright for you
...
because baby, you're already burnt out
Author notes
i finally snapped out of my writer's block for a moment. I guess it's about fake lies and drug abuse. I dunno it's all from my imagination anyway
A contest entry
- CarCrashHearts;; by MelissahhMidnite.
421 points, ended June 14, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i'm r-r-r-unning on empty dolls
Comments
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i loved the metaphores.
they're creative and not the typical ones either.
"is as fake as the stars
that shimmer across my throat
in an attempt to shine bright for you"
love that part. but some parts were too verbose.
remember, the best poems are said with as little explanation/words as possible.
otherwise, great job. loved the story line.
keep writing! :] -
this was a cool read i must say i really like this piece so i hope and wish you the best in your writings my friend ~ jewels ~
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stunning
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I found the story line interesting. I only unserstood only about 3/4 of it but I still liked it. Great job.
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great work
i like the whole story line its amazing
thnx for entering
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