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mind movement #4



reflecting under the boughs unfurling
gazing skyward and tasting pins of light
a radiant glimmer shown like sterling
as a flock of moonbeams trip in my sight

whispering movements as a string quartet
as they rest aloft their separate branches
leaves, dancing with wind in a silhouette
and time stands still as the twilight blanches

a cumulus cluster filters leaf light
‘tis an origami of twilight opera
and my mind drinks a smile in delight
to imagine the mythical hydra

floating in memories, my reflections
crescendo of soul, natures’ connections

 

 

 

 

Author notes

OPTION THREE symbolism.

Sonnet
Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable.
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • ellipsist
    June 4, 2007

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    this piece

    contains beautiful imagery and wonderful use of metaphor...

    this is my favorite line:

    gazing skyward and tasting pins of light

    extremely poetic! enchanting, almost!

    I am quickly becoming a fan of your writing!


    • Amera gold member
      June 4, 2007
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      you said: "extremely poetic! enchanting, almost!"

      I looked at your page and I see your metaphor for the word "almost". I blush and am humbled at the high complement.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    This is brilliant and you've used end rhymes that I've rarely seen. I love using the rarer words in poetry, it adds that extra personal challenge and gives more self-satisfaction when a piece is completed successfully.

    This should net you a trophy sister mine, or I shall buy the judge a pair of strong spectacles! Excellent poetic achievement here!

    Thanks for sharing.

    Love you always,

    Laura


  • Swan song gold member
    June 3, 2007

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    I love the last full stanza, yesterdau while hiking I was caught in a thunder storm. A warm rain fell like it does on occasion in the South East. I was in heaven. Thank you!


  • Faeryn
    June 2, 2007

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    wow! I need to write a sonnet for english *criess* but this is a great example! what is an accent falling on every second syllable?


    • Amera gold member
      June 2, 2007
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      An accent falling on every second syllable is what is known as iambic foot it’s an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable like ( da DUM )
      Sonets should be written in iambic pentameter which is five of these in a row: ( da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM )

      Remember all poetry was originally meant to be sung, so always read poetry out loud even your own. If you need help with your homework, I’ll be glad to help.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 2, 2007

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    BREATHE TAKING

    What a wonderful masterpiece you have penned~really love the feel of this one:Leaves dancing in silhouette~Floating in memories my reflections crescendo of soul, nature connection "winner for sure" thank you so much for sharing with me


    • Amera gold member
      June 2, 2007
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      Tender Wolf

      Thank you so much. Your comments are always so encouraging and they make me feel like I really touched you. That’s the dream of all poets.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Swan song gold member
    June 1, 2007
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    I reallylike the third stanmza of this poem. It creates some nice visions with the clouds. Overall it is what you do make things smooth and beautiful.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 1, 2007

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    Wow... Wow... and Wow!!! I want some of that. Where do I sign up. You have hit a homerun with the bases loaded. Great work. Three bunnies.


  • Desire gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    Wowzers!!


    I believe each time I read Your works..
    I have this look

    and I have learned not to hold anything in my hands for I tend to drop it

    Amazing piece again!!
    Love this and all Your pieces Geeeeeeeeeeeeeesh

    Love that form
    You make it look so easy...


    Best wishes to You in the contest!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    stunning and breathtaking Dollface...Love the mix! and the symbolism....awesome My fav line..."as a flock of moonbeams trip in my sight.." awww serene feel as well as climactic...


    • JohnnyD gold member
      June 1, 2007
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      true, Amera does nice work but its' supposed to be 110 here late next week babe, and you 'know' that sucks big time! You'll need to stay in the basement at Banner! LL!

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