I left my heart at the train station
with my "lover" and his "girl"
I left my heart at the train station
as I recalled his lie: "I love you."
[loved you, loved you]
I left my heart at the train station
when I tried to tell myself it hadn't been love.
[hate you, hate you]
I left my heart at the train station
'cause it's all I had to lose.
[its all a blur of hate and lies]
While I cry
Cry to try
Try to die
[ITS ALL A LIE!]
I left my heart at the train station
and walked away a fromer-life.
I left my heart at the train station
and tried to force a smile.
Author notes
**written for a contest**
"I left my heart at the train station" was the line we were being inspired from
A contest entry
- Prompt!! by Naridill.
300 points, ended June 2, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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in the end it always find its way back this is a deeply sad poem that i can't help by be drawn too, cause i think i left my heart when i was a child, keep it flowing
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hmm, i like this, the flow is alittle off but its still good. i loves the stanza
While I cry
Cry to try
Try to die
[ITS ALL A LIE!]
~!~keep writing~!~
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super unique.
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Definately alot of imagery within this, a little longer than rules requested but brillantly done. Not whats in my mind, but I enjoyed it. Had a nice flow and powerful ending.
Much luck.
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you know i read this somewhere, something like it mean, but i like this poem, it has everything to make a broken heart cry, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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