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Ancient Mysteries

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A friend and I had spent the night

talking of far off places,

of camels, dunes and Pyramids

all with eastern traces.

 

To glide on waters so serene

The Nile and all it’s glories,

hearing many colourful tales

of Egypt and her stories.

 

Ancient Gods, the Ennead,

their place in heaven and earth,

strangely sounding names

their stature and their worth.

 

My sleep that night was fitful

I dreamt the strangest dream,

long unbending corridors

the rarest ever seen.

 

The walls, the floor, the ceiling,

in colours bright and bold,

people, birds, the strangest sights

a wonder to behold.

 

Floating way above the ground

I came upon a door

the key around my neck

would fit it, I was sure.

 

Once open, I could not believe

the sight that met my eyes,

a golden chamber filled with light

so bright, it electrifies.

 

The ceiling like a pyramid

but open to the sky,

the stars and moon went rushing past

too fast, so way up high.

 

I floated over to the wall

to touch, to see if real,

my arm just simply disappeared

there was nothing there to feel.

 

I awoke and found myself alone

back here in my room,

had I really visited

an ancient Pharaohs tomb?

 

I can still recall that night,

I long for my return

to solve the unsolved mystery,

answer questions that still burn.

 

 

 

 


Author notes

The dream was real, this is just my account as I remember it and I hope I will return.



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  • echo-ink
    August 30, 2008
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    WOW! Just awesome, indeed.

    This was beautifully written, loved it. great rhyme and flowed wonderfully.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 3, 2007
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    Wow this must have been a breath-taking dream. Very well described and great imagery in explaining this. Sometimes we have dreams that end unsolved or unknown, and wonder ever if our dreams will take us back to that beautiful yet mysterious place. Wonderful write! Best of luck and thanks for entering


  • Bluebook Pet
    July 31, 2007

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    I am very interested listening to dreams and about your dream it was fascinating. I am wondering what do pyramids looks like in the inside? And now here is the answer. Thanks for this one...


  • Tweedle Dum
    July 20, 2007

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    Wow, that would be a pretty amazing dream to dream I imgaine. I especially like the part about when you had the key around your neck. You explained that really well, in fact the imagery here was great. I really liked this soooo Good luck my friend!


  • penman gold member
    June 16, 2007
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    Excellent

    What great poem so full of wonderful images and thoughts. Best of luck in the contest.


  • intanglio2ring
    June 6, 2007

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    WOW!

    And this was real?????????/
    Can I borrow some of your dreams???
    I was enraptured with this tale. This just pulled at my imagination and led me on an adventure.
    Wonderful!
    Tang


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 2, 2007

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    Wonderfully Written!

    This is really interesting.
    Sometimes our dreams have a way
    of playing tricks on us. Leading us
    to places that we have never been
    before and leaving us lost in that
    magical and unforgettable moment.
    It's times like these that we wish
    were real. So many questions tend
    to linger afterwards. Questions
    that we patiently wait to be answered
    if only, in our dreams!

    I really enjoyed this piece from you!
    Thanks a lot for sharing it and may you
    have many more wonderful and memorable
    dreams my friend! Take care!



    Jeremy0826


  • arafura gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    burning questions...

    Once again you have both excelled and entertained!

    Floating far above the ground
    I came upon a door...

    Great work!


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    June 1, 2007

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    Excellent

    An Excellent write sometimes our dreams are just a reflection ofour own imagination and our brains unravelling that which has happened during the days events. This can feel real as it is stored in different sections of our minds. Your story here is an excellent account of what happened within your dream that night well done wishing you all the very best Brian.


  • Sunshine Always
    June 1, 2007

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    Wonderful dream and again a wonderful write. Everything about this poem is so enjoyable...Excellent...mal


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 1, 2007

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    Outstanding!!!!

    You have put your dream in breathtaking clarity here, Sue. The Greater Ennead of Gods have definately touched you. This was an outstanding piece of writing. I loved it. Breathtaking actually.

    Wayne
    xxxx


  • Puppydog gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    SWEETLY BEAUTIFUL!

    Those types of dreams are the best ones, when I have them I always wake with a renew hope and energy.


  • Candy6
    June 1, 2007

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    very out-standing poem

    You rhyme great. Gosh, you are definetely talented writing poetry....cool!

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