glass shards
on the tile floor
a broken knight
A contest entry
- Back to Basics Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended June 6, 2007, 53 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow this is truly amazing. It is no wonder that you have won gold, this is actually probably the only one that truly deserved it in my eyes. Great job, I can see this in many different lights throughout my life.
Bandaid. -
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lol! thank you! 
the thing about haiku i adore is its open-endedness. there's so much to explore.
thank you loads for reading my work! i appreciate your time.
bless ya!
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Thank you for entering our workshop.
glass shards
on the tile floor
a broken knight
This is a very interesting haiku. I really like the aha moment in the last line. It is not real obvious and it makes the reader think a little bit about it. -
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yeah..
it does make one think a bit.
thanks for your comment! glad to know you like it!
bless ya!
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Welcome to Back to Basics!
A very interesting haiku:
glass shards
on the tile floor
a broken knight
I assume the chess piece is broken on the floor, how did it get that way? That would make an interesting haiku alone. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
Susie -
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hmm.. that's an interesting thought. i'll see what i can work into this.
thanks for the pointer!
bless ya!
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