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I wait

I left my heart at the train station,
I left it with you, the moment I saw you
I knew it was you, your soft blue eyes left glinting
As my train pulled up, your wavey brown hair flicking
Purely stunned my mind, how did this even happen
To leave my heart at the train station
It seems a little fantasy, to fall in love with you
But for that brief moment we were together
My heart left me, and my soul can live in peace
As I wait and long to see those blue eyes again

Author notes

oo that was a tricky prompt darkness, don't think i used it well and it was a war to keep it to 10lines, i hope you like. This also describes slightly ru so i hope you dont mind ru, and i know this never has happened lol but its something i could image in my mind

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  • Faithless Angel
    June 4, 2007

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    awww this is so sweet yet sad..
    i got an image of one of those black and white films a guy leaving the girl on the platform as he goes..
    i love it!


  • Naridill gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    Beautiful and lovely futuristic tribute, hehe. But not whats in my head with this quote
    But brillantly penned, as your writes normally are.
    Much luck.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww jem ur too romantic for words
    ru should love it he he
    an amazing poem with love very much described well here
    although love is often hard to describe
    very well written well done

  • Poco Loco
    June 1, 2007

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    awwwww!
    Very romantic and imaginative. Your love and emotion comes into it and makes it sound like your describing a moment in time even if your not!
    lol!


  • LittleRu
    June 1, 2007

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    i have grey eyes with yellow in the middle your the one with blue eyes!! hmm 'wavey hair' ? more like a mane, lol. im teasing you and you know it your allowed poetic licence


    • Darkened Seraph
      June 1, 2007
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      lol sometimes you have blue eyes and you hair is not like a mane lol, but thanks anyway lol


  • daddyskisses
    June 1, 2007

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    aww i like this! it is very cute!i could see the soft blue eyes and it was great! i like the way you discribe! well good job!

    • Darkened Seraph
      June 1, 2007
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      Thanks, thats the first quote/promt i have struggled with so i ended up describing my girlfriend to help the theme. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it

      Dreamer

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