"All aboard", the conductor yells,
one last embrace, final farewells.
Tears falling, hearts breaking...
lovers demise now in the making.
"I love you", not always enough,
letting go is going to be tough.
Fantasy and reality now collide,
souls fall dark when love is denied.
One last look, trying to smile,
memories made, all worthwhile....
I left my heart at the train station
A contest entry
- Prompt!! by Naridill.
300 points, ended June 2, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh what a beauty this is..."Fantasy and reality now collide, souls fall dark when love is denied." I love this but it made me sad too, reminds me of when i had to say goodbye to someone...Excellent!
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Very beautiful. Not whats in my mind. But I loved the flow of this and it was indeed a beautiful piece with a nice flow. Loved reading this.
Much luck.
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Awww, how sad
Hmmm, now just which one is leaving. Maybe there can be a way for this heartbreak to be avoided. For love conquers all. Well done write with excellent rhyme and flow. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Mouser
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Wow you take and prompt and run with it. Creating a wonderful masterpiece. This has the making of quite a wonderful story! You did an awesome job on this. Best of luck in the contest my sweet friend.
Jeannie
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Where did he go? Why did he leave? Maybe he'll get off the train! Or you'll get on! Hey, a girl can hope, try to be optimistic
This is sad, and so real, we know this actually happens and that makes it all the more difficult to swallow...
Reality can really suck!
Great expression though, you got the emotions through very effectively and we all know this pain and kind of suffering...
Stupid conductor...
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