Awakened by premonition… my eyes remained closed.
I can feel the darkness choking me.
My bed sinking… my worn springs screeching.
Afraid! ... My mind refusing to believe.
My covers lay cast aside.
On my skin… I feel breathing… wet drops… as if the darkness was salivating.
My clock… was ticking loud… as if a voice.
My heart was pounding.
My ankles felt bound by claws… and were spreading.
A soft and wet sensation… lapping… and lapping at the inner most of my thighs!
Against my very will I moaned! Clawing! Clawing at me.
Touching me with beastly hands. Piercing my skin as if needles in a pin cushion.
My waterfall began to release! The darkness held me!
Awakened… but too afraid to open my eyes.
I felt the hairy claws push…Push… PUSH! against my thighs.
It was so persistent… no longer able to struggle in my mind, I released my limbs… and my curtains opened.
I lay there. I lay there while being devoured.
Eyes closed, my body began to shutter… my eyes pressed closed.
A loud… loud moan released! … And then I submitted.
Exhausted… I waited for death.
I then heard a sound……………
Meow.
Author notes
To see the light is to be blinded. Do you not know that in darkness the eyes open wider?
~ Thud, Terry Pratchett
In a list
A contest entry
- A Love as dark as the Devil Himself by TheDemonEve.
450 points, ended June 2, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh my God... I was not expecting that ending. Wow. Good job. Good luck in the contest
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This is still as hilarious as it was when you entered it in my other contest. Brilliant!
Best of luck and thanks for entering!
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scary
Really dark, compelling write with a laugh out loud finish, all came together when I read through a second time. Very interesting night time encounter.
Thanks for entering!
*~Huntress~* -
OH - MY - GOD
GOLD!!!!!
YOUR BRILLIANT!
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LOL. Nice little twist at the end...to be honest I though you were gonna say it was a dog... I loved how it was so creepy and I was totally not seeing it as funny until the very end...which was AWESOME!!! Thanks so much for entering!
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wonderful
This is soooooo good. It really made me laugh. I am adding it to the finalist list. I would love to know the inspiration behind this great write but then again it might spoil the fun. thanks again for entering and good luck.
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Thanks so much for fixing it because it is really cute. At first i was freaked out wondering what it was but the ending was really funny. It was kind of confusing...but it's still a great poem. Thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest : ]
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So. I need you to correct everything...so, you need to go back and read everything. Then after you fix it I will comment on it.
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This is most defineitly an interesting read and I will read this one again
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Wow... Oops dont know if I would admit that. But thank you for doing it LOL I love dark humor thanks for entering my contest.
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I thought this was kind of confusing. It was definatley an interesting read. I personally don't care for poems that are in paragraph form. But anyways. It had good imagery. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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This really is erotic dark humor. Suprise ending that made me laugh. Very clever and descriptive. Thanks for entering.
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This is a bit confusing, but I do like how it masqueraded beneath an evil sheen of darkness.
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What a build up!
I think this was a way cool write! Scary, erotic, and then...a meow! 
Tooo coool!
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There was such a big build up, and I was left expecting the worst when all of a sudden there was a meow Extremely clever use of words, I cannot believe how funny that ending was
Good luck in the contest!!
love and peace
halleluja
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