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Ragdoll;;;

Strown Across The Floor In The Corner Of The Room,
You Look At Me With Those Bloodshot Green Eyes,
Eyeliner Streaks Snaking Down Your Pale White Cheeks,
Your Blue Glitter Lips Dried And Cracked,
Then You Bite Down On Your Lip When it Matters Most.
A Shade Of Red Appears And Dribbles Down Your Chin.
Can You Taste The Blood?
Taste It As It Flows Past Your Lips.

Shake and Tremble All You Want Darling,

You'll Never Break Past The Strings That Hold You Down.

Rip The Seams That Hold You Together Then I'll Show You;

How The Strings Become The Stitches In Your Mouth♥









Five Words Is All It Would Take, Is It Really That Hard To Say?





1)You're 
   2)Worth 
      3)More
        4)Than
           5)This;;

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  • Exodus gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    I love the lay out of the piece. I wasn't sure if you meant "Strown" or "Strewn" in the first line, as far as I know "strown" isn't a word, but I may be wrong. I really liked the last two lines of the first stanza, very powerful


  • Morbidly Gorgeous
    June 21, 2007
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    This Is Absolutely Hands Down My Favorite Poem By You


  • love tank x
    June 1, 2007

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    "Eyeliner Streaks Snaking Down Your Pale White Cheeks,
    Your Blue Glitter Lips Dried And Cracked,
    Then You Bite Down On Your Lip When it Matters Most.
    A Shade Of Red Appears And Dribbles Down Your Chin."

    What I love most about this piece (esp. that part^^)is the fact that while you're reading it, you get this swirling image of colors in your head. It's awesome. Good job :]] <3

  • bloodstaindmind
    June 1, 2007
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    I really like this piece. Especially how you ended it. That was so very creative on your part. This poem actually kind of scares me. You're probably talking about a girl in this one, but for some reason I started to imagine Pinocchio lol. Great job