Methadone pills and metallic syringes,
Spread across my floor,
As I take one more dose [too many],
And the shock sets in.
Drench me in you [numb]cocaine flavored kisses,
And give me antidepressants to relieve the pain,
But your stimulating touch can do the same,
Though ectasy is just as easy.
Tell me I'm beautiful [like a hallucinogin],
And show me your morphine-induced love,
So I can tell you how I feel,
And say my excuse was the opium.
You [dreary] bloodshot eyes look my way,
And you start to tell me how much you need me [what a lie],
I would blame my actions on the heroin,
But not even tranquilizers could have stopped us,
From commiting the ultimate lovers' crime.
♥
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Tell me I'm beautiful [like a hallucinogin],
And show me your morphine-induced love,
So I can tell you how I feel,
And say my excuse was the opium.
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But not even tranquilizers could have stopped us,
From commiting the ultimate lovers' crime.
My two favorite parts.
Amazing connection. -
its amazing, i dont think i could have ever connected these two things together as well as you did. awesome write, excellent job
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i love the way you cannect two totally different things. Love and drugs.
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bold and fearless write
You have a strong writers voice that breaks through!!
You painted the imagery very well, much impact to the
struggle.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
Seattle, WA.
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I love love love this. Wow.
So I can tell you how I feel,
And say my excuse was the opium.
I know that feeling way too well. It's easier to be honest when you know you have something to blame if things don't go so well. This is wonderful sweetie.
x♥x
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Tell me I'm beautiful [like a hallucinogin]
my fav line.
my fav lie. -
I like how you relate to drugs in this,
Associated with love, it really does make sence.
Addictive =]
Thank you for entering!
x
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this was a nice write, it had alot of meaning in it. good luck babe =]
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Love all the metaphors of human feelings and expression and turning them into drugs, making them a cross over and how the drug references almost describe the way another person effects you, it's good. Thank you for entering this write.
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aaaaaaaahhhhhh. this is awesome!!!! dude i loooove it!
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This was a pretty awesome poem. I liked your use of words. Nicely done. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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wow awesome peom...really dark and deep. i like the line:
Tell me I'm beautiful [like a hallucinogin],
And show me your morphine-induced love,
really good write...
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