Raging storms against one’s kin;
frozen vengeance takes its toll.
Heaven’s own despise the sin;
raging storms.
Anger pounds upon the soul,
burns the sacred space within,
strikes the land that once was whole.
Both sides claim the right to win;
aching children fear the cold.
Satan can not hide his grin;
raging storms.
Author notes
Option 4
Conflicts in Israel, Iraq, Sudan - anywhere there is civil war and genocide of one's "countrymen".
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This is very powerful and the repetition is used well. The fact that it is short makes it even more gripping. Thank you for entering
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Thanks for your entry
Powerful words and strong emotions. This really does depict a raging storm. Storm of pain and suffering. Well stated, good flow and structure.
God Bless
Tammy -
your message was loud and clear sad woooooorld we live in
but a very well expressed poem thank you for your entry
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You're very welcome
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A piece worth reading
I really like how you compared these conflicts in Israel, Iraq and Sudan to raging storms. It is very effective in expressing your thoughts of such terrible conflicts presently occuring in the world. Great portraiture in this as well as the inevitable truth that has existed amongst our nations since the beginning of time. Thank you for your wonderful entry & best of luck in my contest -
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Thank you for your comment.
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Both sides claim the right to win
Aching children fear the cold
Satan can not hide his grin
Raging storms.
no one wins against
these odds -
There is no doubt this is a very good peice of work here. Very good peice I enjoyed reading this very much
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A really fabulous poem that was composed in a tight and compact fashion that really adds to its emotional punch. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
David
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shows destruction and greed well.
I felt the metaphor of raging storms a wonderful fit.
Blue -
Great write, thank you for entering the contest. good luck
whisper
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wow!!!
very deep and yet so true. well penned -
This poem is so very "right on" that it is heartbreaking... Awesome work!
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A wonderful piece, I loved the emotion and the flow of this piece. Excellent entry. Thank you my friend. Hugs, Bunny
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This is great. Such strong emotion in this. Excellent imagery as well.
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