My heart is at the train station
Stepped on by the girl I loved
Bleeding and convulsing on ripped veins
Blood pools around the dead organ
Stray dogs come down to eat the remains
There's a hole in my chest, an empty space
Looking for love now in a new place
But these girls don't like heartless men
So I try to tell them over and over
I left my heart at the train station
A contest entry
- Prompt!! by Naridill.
300 points, ended June 2, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting, I feel this was close but no match. You indeed opened a willing perspective and it was very nice to read.
Good flow, nicely penned.
Much luck.
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very powerful imagery and emotion! wonderful! I loved it. keep it up!
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Holy Moly!!
This poem grabs and tugs at the Hearstrings!!
Powerful piece penned
Beautiful verse though
Thank You for sharing this emotion packed
voice~~
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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wow
great take on this, love the ending.
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you know i like this i mean you did a great job on this, the poem has a strong sorrow with it, something that i don't think will heal for a while but sometimes when we think we lost our heart it finds us, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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