Deafness embraced
by the whiteness
of my walls
(and inner harmony)
You say you scream,
but I rebuke that,
I hear nothing
just silence
and it makes me
off-balance
are you there to catch me?
Falling into
the void that is us
although at one time
it held so much promise
(do you remember?)
A contest entry
- Silence by -ButterflyCuts-.
300 points, ended June 6, 2007, 13 entries
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fantastic!
I liked this short and sweet.
I feel the same way like you. I write my feelings first, my urge is to get them out. After that is done I worry about the rest, lol half the time I don't even worry at all.
I have asked myself a question similar to the one here. (who will catch me if I decide to fall?)
reading this poem reminds me of it...who?
I liked it a lot, it was a great read.
::huggs&kisses::
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aww the silence is upon us.. you are so good at what you do.. there are no words to even express that.. brilliance is you.. keep up the great work and good luck
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wow that's good
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when those encasing dreams be what they once were before, the click that did before start the fire inside a heart, is not the same anymore. it is no greater, yet no lesser, but the mind cannot tell apart. the fall is of on into themselves, not chained once again by what is felt to what is known, but to what is believed.
wonderful.
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whoa! the tittle tempted me to click on it. its very unsual to find whites in dark poetry. i loved the way you potrayed the feelings beautifully dealing with specific words tangled in an unique way.
short and so balanced in its own style
keep going
Ankita
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I enjoyed this very much, your intense emotion and the reference to white was wonderful.
All the best in the contest!
love and peace
halleluja
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