I don't think about you anymore doll
I can't taste your kiss on my painted lips
I don't spend my time thinking about us together
In some tequila neverland that doesn't e.x.i.s.t
My tears won't fill up a river of impossible length
-I stopped crying over you months ago anyway-
My dreams shattered but my heart is .just.fine.
You always did hold yourself up too high
Love was never something that we shared
|Baby I lalalalalust you|
Never did matter;;never did care
Just another insecure whore you get to c.l.a.i.m
[Lover,lover go away;; please don't stay another day]
Author notes
Dancing Marionettte
And I think that dirty pretty is just taking something that hurts you, hurts other people, and in that way is ugly, and making it appear beautiful to you and everybody else. It's like taking a piece of trash and dression it up in make-up and calling it a masterpiece.
- A Glitter Scarred Mascara Teared Group group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything Dirty Pretty; Options Available and Prewrites!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
375 points, ended June 8, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [[B.r.e.a.k]] [m][e] [[D.O.W.N]] by rawrbby.
410 points, ended June 9, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What is Dirty Pretty? by Madison Mary.
300 points, ended July 20, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - try and break me(break ups) by Felix BlackHeart.
390 points, ended September 16, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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[Lover,lover go away;; please don't stay another day]
this is amazingg.
I like the dirty pretty form you included
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the way you typed this was strange, but it still was a good poem. very unique. thanx for entering!
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I really like this poem
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I love the last line
A good twist on the old rhym -
Wonderful piece! I absolutley loved it! The imagery was fantastic, the line with 'tequila neverland' was amazing! Great job, really wonderful!
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wow this is fantastic also, tequila neverland, what a word, what a phrase, what an image.
the e.x.i.s.t. the c.l.a.i.m, this adds like a lyrical quality to the whole thing.
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[Lover,lover go away;; please don't stay another day]
this is my favorite part^^
this is so,,strong in a way i really think your awesoem so is your poem *.* keep it up hun this rocks -
Wait... I've commented already.
xDDDD
I must really like it.
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haha
when i read your comment, i was like that name sounds sooo familar.
thanks for commenting again [:
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Love was never something that we shared
|Baby I lalalalalust you|
Never did matter;;never did care
Just another insecure whore you get to c.l.a.i.m
That is my definite favorite stanza. I love the lalalalalust part. So true, and emotional... -
I love you put the title into the poem first of all. second, the emotion in the piece is absolutely amazing. my favorite part was
Love was never something that we shared
|Baby I lalalalalust you|
Never did matter;;never did care
Just another insecure whore you get to c.l.a.i.m
It's hard getting over someone like that..Well not really even getting over it, just getting it through your head, or argh, i can't find the right word..but maybe you know what I'm trying to say. I can say I've been through something like that ♥this make believe romance is killing my make believe heart..lets pretend that everything is fine, put on our fake smiles and keep wasting our time♥
thank you for entering
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i get exactly what you are saying whith the whole 'getting' over getting through thing. it makes comlpete sense to me.
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good
I didn't want to sound like a complete idiot.
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Another raw and brutal entry.It's not easy being a whore , or so I can imagine... Just being able to forget all that has been done to you and to not think of yourself as dirt [[though you normally do anyway, deep down]] I can feel the sorrow and just begin to lose the taste of him myself. ♥
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-I stopped crying over you months ago anyway-
^ that's my favorite line. It reminds me of, well, me. Love it, girl. Keep up the great work! ♥ Erin -
Dark piece which I liked a lot. The layout of this piece was interesting and this was a powerful write.
Pozo
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great title! and the rest of the poem pops like an emotional uzi!
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Wow. This is exactly how I feel about my ex lol. I love this. Everything about it is just wonderful. Brilliant doll.
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Wow, I know how this feels when you've ended with someon && they'll parade around with a new whore on their arm but want to see you crying in their shadow for the next year.
'I don't think about you anymore doll
I can't taste your kiss on my painted lips
I don't spend my time thinking about us together
In some tequila neverland that doesn't e.x.i.s.t'
loved those lines^^^
♥
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"|Baby I lalalalalust you|"
Wowie, That Line Made My Mouth Gawp Open!!
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Hehehe
Beautiful Dollypie.
Mwah
xx
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wow nickole, this was good, really good. Good luck in the contest, i'm sure you'll place with this; and if not...well, i just wont go there, lol.
I can't taste your kiss on my painted lips
I don't spend my time thinking about us together
In some tequila neverland that doesn't e.x.i.s.t
^i loooooooved that, made me think of a few people. lol. Good luck again.
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I love it.
Even though I entered that contest too, I hope you get a trophy for this wonderful poem.
[Lover,lover go away;; please don't stay another day]
Was the best part, in my opinion.
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Oh wow. Great write.
I like the first stanza best, especially:
"I can't taste your kiss on my painted lips"
That's a great line =]
Good luck in the contest, I hope you do well.
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OMG I HEART IT!!!!! *adds to favorites* you'll do wellish if you enter in a contest
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