The midnight sky, black as the ink,
That drips from my writing quill;
My mind is blank, so tormented;
My lips remain so still.
Broken and beat, mind and soul;
Flames baptize my hell.
Unspoken words, bound in chains;
My spirit longs to tell.
My beating heart, crucified,
Painted like frozen coal.
The hush of night, a dark delight;
An ache blankets my soul.
The phantom of my rhyme,
Hovers just beyond my page.
The dust begins to settle,
Till its scattered with my rage.
A contest entry
- Express your feelings by Razor-Blade Romance.
313 points, ended June 1, 2007, 16 entries
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Liked the flow and imagery, not so keen on ten "my", but other than that good write.
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a creative way of expressing the frustration that comes with writer's block!!!!!!!I have it quite often. I am lucky to write a poem twice in a month!!! This had such a poetic flair to it though and I could see you there with the imagery you painted.I loved the last stanza best!!!It sums up the intent of the poem perfectly!!!I am sure all of your reades will lelate with this profound poem, I know I sure can!!! Thanks for sharing your talent with me today!!!~~Toni~~
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I love the flow and feel of this piece. Writers block is a nightmare but eventually it can be overcome. A well crafted piece of writing that was very interesting to read. Well done and many thanks for entering my contest.
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yea. i love the rhyming to. Sometimes it's hard to do rhyming poems but you captured it just right
loved it =) !!!
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i really really really love ht rhyme in this one you are an amzing writter, keep it up
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The imagery was amazing
But I just cant tell if you were terying to have a rhyme scheme or not..
it lookks like ti but then agian it doesnt
thanks for entering/
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I love this poem! It's beautiful & the flow of it is amazing! Great job!
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Don't know, Just like it.
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"My beating heart, crucified,
Painted like frozen coal.
The hush of night, a dark delight;
An ache blankets my soul." is my favorite part good luck
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good job. i could actually feel the rage u felt.
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Nicely written. Well done !!
I like the emotion expresed within
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