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gods jewels create
natures sparkling gem, mounted
ruby pearl setting
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Author notes
A
Traditional Haiku'
Syllable count:
5-7-5
*The Power of God*
A contest entry
- Lets do a Haiku by Swan song.
420 points, ended June 10, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - **10 Options within 10 options, Enjoy** by Hebz.
575 points, ended July 4, 2007, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honorable Mentions Wanted, judged tonight by whispernthedark.
600 points, ended July 7, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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profoundly moving haiku...
I miss reading your poetry. I went without a computer for well over a year after it crashed, but I have another now. I have a fondness for creative imagery, and this one definitely leaves me smiling. Very well done! Bravo!
Don -
Wow this is stunning. Sighs-I love photos and poems like these. Awesome write.
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What a stunning write. You've created such wonderful imagery in your brevity. I have an appreciation for haiku and this one is a gem. Thank you for sharing.
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You are most kind to say that.....thank you for dropping by...God bless you,
Bear ~
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congrats on HM, definatly desevered
love always
erica carnea
xxx
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Dear Poet,
As an overview, I'd suggest punctuation on gods.
Thank you for entering Haiku and Senryu contest.
Nice.
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Beautiful. I love pearls, and the image of a ruby pearl.
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Absolutely stunning piece!
I love how you captured the image so beautifully with creative imagery. I love the metaphor in the second line. Bravo, Arkbear, as always!!
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No words to express this gorgeous piece of well crafted work, I see we both have an excellent choice in beautiful pictures too. Very nicely written.
Shaz xx
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Lions poetry auction #1
This was YUMMY
The haiku was so perfect
The form is SO HARD
And you fitted in so much
And really did it so well
To get the meaning and the needed beauty to get to the reader
The last line was PERFECT
Well done
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thanks, cute haiku
whisper
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Unique and vivid imagery used to express God's natural wonder. Exquisite!
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Lion's Auction #1
You truly came thru with a awesome write for a incredible amber & topaz lit sunset Abeauty all their own magesticly enhanced by the ruby setting sun. well done my friend xx No offence hun but what Jeff Swan was referring to was the jewels in first line 1 syllable giving it a 4 count instead of 5-either way it's well written and a beautiful piece xxx
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Stardust-luvr ~
I, as well as many other Poets here on AP, are accustomed to using ( one ) syllable counter which is fail-proof ~
http://www.wordscount.info/hw/syllable.jsp
*jewels* is two syllables, not one, making my beginning line, ( 5 ) syllables....not ( 4 ) ~
No offense Hun, but there is nothing wrong with my syllable count ~
Have a lovely evening ~
Bear ~
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WOW!!
Brilliant, I like this form..Much said in few powerful words & much shown behind. I like this piece lots & lots...
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
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My Dear Heba ~
Can I say thanks.....and say how lovely you are ~
You look like Faith Hill~~
No....this is not for brownie points....just wanted to say thanks for the review....and tell you how pretty you are
Have a lovely evening ~
Bear ~
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Lions auction #1
Gosh, I've read some good haikus on here, but this one is simply the best! nice, simple, but really awsome. and cool picture too!
hugs,
Steph
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Steph ~
You are most kind in your words & review ~
Thank you for stopping by ~
Bear ~
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LIONS AUCTION #1
What a creative piece to see the beautiful setting sun as a ruby, the use of the jewelry-referenced words, the thought-twist of the fire the jewel which the fire creates, all as brilliant as the photo.
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Hmmm, I left applause last time, but no smileys showed up. You deserve them, so I'll try again.
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Lions Auction #1
Hooray for haikus! You are always able to capture the beauty of nature so well with your words, and this haiku is no exception. Fantastic picture to go along with the poem. Even your font colors accentuate the beautiful sunset. Masterfully penned, as always uncle bear >pixxie<
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What a great job on this one!!! Yes I know I have already commented, but it is in the auction, lol.
Love ya my uncle
Nyetta -
Check syllables
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Jeff ~
There is nothing wrong with my syllable count ~
Bear ~
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Spectacular Read
You captured the sunset in all its awe! I always called the sun my fire pearl......Thanks for sharing this beautiful haiku.........excellent writing..novy
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What an awesome picture - and lovely poem to accompany it. You are really getting more into form poetry as of late - wonderful writes.
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Precious!!
Oh My!! This is one Precious Gem You have penned
Love the images and how they Touch deep!!
Beautifully done!
Powerful in message
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
Form King
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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This is so beautiful and the picture adds to the over all enchantment..Great haiku..~Pastel
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Good one Bro, You have captured the scene so well in this word picture vignette. This one is a GEM.
Dennis
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Beautiful! That's amazing, Bear! Perfect description for the picture. it has a soft flow. I love it! Wonderful job!
~Butterfly~
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a fitting piece for glory about to pass and the signal of love for the beauty shared. Lovem, Tom B.
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Fits with picture perfection.
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Awesome
Love the picture, especially since I am into sunsets.... the poem goes great with the picture. The title is great because my oldest daughters name is Pearl...
Yvonne
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My Dearest Uncle,
This is just amazing!!!!!!! Something so soft and delicate in this one! Makes one long for the sun (which has left us behind today) and the romance can be found with sunsets/sunrises that are just as beautiful as the one in your picture, and that you speak of!!!!! Great one! Best of luck in the contest!!
Love ya bunches!
Nyetta
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Just so beautiful...
Sigh....
I love sunsets/sunrises; some of God's greatest gifts to us
Wish you all the very best!
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