Looking high in the skies at night,
The moon in the clouds and swirling winds,
Shooting across the sky as fast as lightning,
Streaks of light as bright as the sun.
Maybe these streaks are the shooting stars,
Ones where we make wishes to our heart's content,
Hoping with all of our very souls inside,
That they come true making life great to live.
Then again the lights could be the souls of the dead,
Wondering endlessly through the winds of the world,
Completely lost with no direction on where to go,
Trying desperately to find their way home.
Or maybe the lights represent the hope that fades away,
Wanting to maintain the bright glow we all know,
Because we all know that once that light goes out,
Everything is lost even the hope from within.
Mainly the lights do represent a new kind of hope,
One that comes from the courage within,
Crossing the sky as fast as the wind,
Showing that brighter days are ahead of us all.
When it finally comes to a point in the end,
We all see things that mean different things,
So when you look up and see lights in the sky,
The question is what do they mean to you?
Author notes
This is my first poem in over a year so be gentle but be honest as I'm trying to get back to my writing roots and provide many more poems on here.
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent!
A powerful poem that asks some searching questsions and then suggest sthe answers. As you say at the end, all things mean different things to all people. Good imagery, good rhythm and good choice of words.
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Relaxing read...well done great imagination, thanks for sharing
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This is a nice writing to ponder and your ending asks a response from us. I liked it!
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Soft piece...
This piece has a gentleness to it...so overwhelmingly calm...
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This had an almost dreamy quality to it as you took your audience on a journey of gentle thought. I have a niggle about repetition and there are some words I'd change like "lights" and "within", but that's only my personal preference. The final stanza is a perfect ending for this piece, leaving us to ponder your words. Thanks for sharing. La x
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Frosty25
Very well done. A painting of the night sky in words and I especially love the ending. Not only do you hold the reader with each line but make you stop and think at the end as well. A lovely twist to a nice write. Thank you for allowing me to read it. You are BACK.
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this was really good. L love the detail in it.
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Love the analytical mind(as I have one myself), the expressive heart, and the challenge to the reader to search within. Great job.. hope to see more.
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stands up and applauds
bravo Bravo and BRAVO.......... wow everything is just beautifully crafted..... each word and line flow beautifully all the way. i m speeachless i dont know wat to say. besides youre a great poet. keep up the great work...........
Liana
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Good
A beautifully crafted and well constructed piece. Many times decernment of what truly is depends on your ability to see with spiritual eyes. Well done.
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Get back in your roots? Seems to me you already have them well in to the ground! How beautiful this is! The wording is nicely done. The last line, you left as a question. I sat back and actually thought about it. Very nice job.
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