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A date with X

Seizuristic flashing
on, off, on, off
pumping, thrashing, grinding
hot, wet, close
distant dryness
wailing, screaming, siren-like
bursting one sense
swirling toxic liquid
encased on wrists
glowing, flowing, blurry
sliding compact impact
released by
melted and fused
numbness.

A contest entry

I've haven't been to a rave yet... and this poem is so stereotypical.

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  • horrorfanatic
    June 1, 2007
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    thank you

  • horrorfanatic
    May 31, 2007

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    this is a way sick poem! i love the way you wrote it. and stereotypical yes but its true. i love raves too theyre so fun. i bet if you went to one you come up with an amazing poem. i mean you came up with this and you havent even been to one lol. it would be cool to see what you come up with if you get to go to one eventually. id love to read it. anyway really good job on this poem i love it.