There are marvels in the day time; magic in twilight
Enchantment in the evenings; mystery at night.
Just look around and you will find
Myriad colours, tastes and smells;
Melody and music each one casting spells.
Sunlight, moonshine, twinkling stars,
Whispering rain and tingling breeze;
God's marvels every where even in a baby's sneeze.
The path maybe forbidding, destiny we don’t choose,
I know of austerity, the feeling of pain and bruise,
It takes you in a startle, and then you suddenly lose,
Take my hand my dear friend, I beg you, don’t refuse,
This road to healing pain, I took when I paid my dues,
Put your head on my shoulder, together we’ll sing the blues,
We'll walk through the shadows, until we find the hues,
If we have to cross the desert, or rocks of aching spews,
You'll have my drinking water, and you will wear my shoes,
Lean on me my dear friend, confreres come in two’s,
I’ll wash your fester wounds, with frolic of morning dews,
We’ll pass through the fires, with hope and faith in clues,
Together we’ll come to rest, at final triumph pews,
Take your steps my dear friend, my heartbeats are your cues,
In times of your loneliness, or moments of your muse,
Remember that your spirit, has never suffered hews,
Take my hand my dear friend, a shining day pursues,
Beyond the dim of sunset, a glorious dawn ensues.
Seek with love, heed with happiness and God bless...
A contest entry
- INSPIRE ME!! by jazzerina.
345 points, ended April 15, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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316 points, ended April 18, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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600 points, ended May 10, 2008, 12 entries
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600 points, ended April 30, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
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425 points, ended May 15, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 10 entries
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Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very sweet!!!!
This is very touching!!! I had asked in my rules for fresh writes but since I forgot to click no pre-writes I'll allow this one...This made my eyes misty thinking of my baby girl off and out in the world..Great words of wisdom and encouragement here...Thanks for your entry and the best of luck in my contest!!!~~Toni~~
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This is a very uplifting piece. It holds a lot of hope and love. Nice rhymes. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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thank you for the comfort you shared with me. the hardest part is leaning on others in my hour of need. This gave me comfort from my grief. Thank you for sharing it with me.
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Thanks for this entry into the contest! I am sure Brenda is going to love it, and find as much comfort as I did in your words.
Best of luck to you in this contest!
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I thought it was a very uplifting piece of poerty... This poem really moved ,me touching me in my soul deeply painting a very vivid picture in my mind like a feeling of flying. I loved IT!
Thank you for entering!
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Great!
Some of my favorite lines are: the 7th stanza; and
"You'll have my drinking water, and you will wear my shoes"
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this was just an amazing piece and there wasn't one part that i didn't like! words, emotions, feelings...all evoked something within. thanks for sharing and for your entry!
*rianna
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AMAZING!
This was absolute perfection and it is EXACTLY what i am looking for...i would point out my favorite part, but then i would just be repeating the entire thing!
The emotions are clear and the words speak to me...they are very close to what has happened in the past in my life. This was absolutely beautiful and thank you so much for entering!
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nice it was sweet i wish u luck thank you for entering
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This is beautful and very happy. I like that you described beauty and happiness in simple things like bees and baby sneezes. I like this a lot. I also like that fact that at the end of your poem you said that you would help people find happiness too. It makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Great job.
Alyssa*rose
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This is wonderful - imagery is great and the flow of this piece - lets just say wow - good luck
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AWESOME I love the last part!
GREAT job!
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This is an amazing write. It flows really well with such emotion. The rhyming is excellent and has such good imagery behind it.
my favourite part would have to be:
"The path maybe forbidding, destiny we don’t choose,
I know of austerity, the feeling of pain and bruise,
It takes you in a startle, and then you suddenly lose,
Take my hand my dear friend, I beg you, don’t refuse,
This road to healing pain, I took when I paid my dues,
Put your head on my shoulder, together we’ll sing the blues,
We'll walk through the shadows, until we find the hues,
If we have to cross the desert, or rocks of aching spews,
You'll have my drinking water, and you will wear my shoes,
Lean on me my dear friend, confreres come in two’s,
I’ll wash your fester wounds, with frolic of morning dews,
We’ll pass through the fires, with hope and faith in clues,
Together we’ll come to rest, at final triumph pews,
Take your steps my dear friend, my heartbeats are your cues,
In times of your loneliness, or moments of your muse,
Remember that your spirit, has never suffered hews,
Take my hand my dear friend, a shining day pursues,
Beyond the dim of sunset, a glorious dawn ensues."
This was an extroadinary piece! well done!!
Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering.
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thanks for thewondeful entry , and good luck in the contest
Scarlet
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Awe..Beautiful write..thank you for this entry..
Peace and love
Melissa and Emily -
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING ... A VERY BEAUTIFUL GIFT INDEED ... THE GIFT TO WRITE ... GOD'S MARVELS ... A BEAUTIFUL THOUGHT ... FULL OF IMAGERY AND VERY POWERFUL ... THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS CONTEST ... YOU HAVE PENNED A BEAUTIFUL PIECE ...
THANK YOU SO MUCH
MUCH LOVE
SMILE, IT CONFUSES PEOPLE
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This was a very beautifully written, they really are God's marvels even though we dont always notice.
great write thanks for entering -
Wow I have to say that this is really beautiful. Now Billy Joe might have a hard time understanding this one but I believe I can explain it to him. Thank you so much for entering this in my contest it is truely a beautiful write. Bless you.
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Nicely done
You have some beautiful words in here
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APPRECIATION
Let me use this medium to show my appreciation to you for these excellent and encouraging remarks about a fellow poet.
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Wow!
The path maybe forbidding, destiny we don’t choose,
I know of austerity, the feeling of pain and bruise,
It takes you in a startle, and then you suddenly lose,
Take my hand my dear friend, I beg you, don’t refuse,
This road to healing pain, I took when I paid my dues,
Put your head on my shoulder, together we’ll sing the blues,
We'll walk through the shadows, until we find the hues,
If we have to cross the desert, or rocks of aching spews,
You'll have my drinking water, and you will wear my shoes,
Lean on me my dear friend, confreres come in two’s,
I’ll wash your fester wounds, with frolic of morning dews,
We’ll pass through the fires, with hope and faith in clues,
Together we’ll come to rest, at final triumph pews,
Take your steps my dear friend, my heartbeats are your cues,
In times of your loneliness, or moments of your muse,
Remember that your spirit, has never suffered hews,
Take my hand my dear friend, a shining day pursues,
Beyond the dim of sunset, a glorious dawn ensues.
This is extraordinary!
Thank you so much!
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Thanks
This meandered all over creation and finally wound up with a birthday wish. Thanks for entering the contest. I really appreciate it. Hope you have a blessed day.
Andy
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Passionate and Soulful
This reminds me of the passionate writing of the Great Poets of Old like Shakespeare. Long yet so tantalizing you don't want to miss anything and stop until you finish reading. Powerful ending too.
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This piecei s beautiful with it's imagery, it's message, and it's rhyming! Everything flowed out into a fantastic birthday wish for Afrodisia! I am sure he couldn't have asked for a better present!
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Wow
Such beautiful expressions, I am sure this will please
our dear Afro, success to you in contest.
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I think this is so beautiful. I cannot believe how beautiful. Thank you so very much. Love, Lane
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Wow! Very nice. Best of luck in the contest. Three bunnies.
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hee hee. very long but very good. i'm sure she'll like this poem. I say happy B-day, too
. good luck in this contest, sweetheart.
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You never wrote anything like this for me on my birthday This was beautiful! The way it was written and the beautiful sentiment is..... beautiful!!!!! 
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