Do not be in a hurry to see me
You will see,
My black hair falling gracefully against my cheek
My petal smooth skin glowing with the day
Or my big eyes with child-like innocence
Do not be in a hurry to see me
You will see
My firm breasts that are the envy of many
My lovely hips that turn the heads of all
Or my beautiful long legs that no model has
Do not be in a hurry to see me
You will see
My tender fingers that will caress you daily
My white shaped teeth that will nibble on you
Or my pouty lips that will kiss you everyday
Do not be in a hurry to see me
You will see
My graceful walk that stops the traffic
My lovely smile that will brighten your day
Or my gentle laughter that will rid you of your sorrows
Instead,
Please take a look at my soul
Read me, hear my thoughts
My pain, my happiness
My fantasies and my dreams!
Feel me, listen to me
Let me live in your thoughts
That I believe,
Is the quickest way to your heart
Do not be in a hurry to me
You will be smitten by my beauty.
A contest entry
- AP Girlfriend Contest by The Dork Knight.
650 points, ended June 10, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make eyes sparkle with your words by ladame.
450 points, ended June 1, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The idea is excellent and for the most part carried out very well. I do like the separation into two contrasting sections.
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I like the idea very much. However, some of your words, such as "lovely" don't really hold weight for me.
I still love the "prized lady" idea, and I often write about it myself. Thanks for your entry - quite inspired
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thank you for entering this lovely poem, good luck!
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This is too true, men rush to quickly into situations. And relationships, I really like this one very much, it really makes you think.UNT
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nice
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Life is best when savored slowly and not gulped in rush. I hope you find a patient one to share your life
the Satyr
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really neat poem, i like the way that you describe your beauty, both inner and outer. inner beauty is the most real kind of beauty, after all. this is a wonderful piece you have written. my favorite line is "my petal smooth skin glowing with the day"
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Awesome =) Excellent visual imagery throughout. You come across as confident and I love that!
I love the concept that you express near the end of the poem of how beauty isn't skin deep.
It must be hard for beautiful woman to find someone who will want them for more then their looks and this poem captires that concept.
Well done and thank you for your thoughtful comment on my poem.
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I like it... Too often are most people quick to make assumptions based solely on appearance, but you have shown in this poem that one should not judge a book by it's cover. Well done.
Laura
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Thanks Laura, glad you liked it!
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Outstanding
I thought this poem talked about what is really important, that within rather than what the world perceives. This poem brings the message home, beauty is not just skin deep it is something more that is are thoughts and feelings are attitude to life. A great poem with a fine message.
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Thanks.I like your name.But do you realise poetry is a door?
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Lessons Learned
Sometimes we can learn quickly or take a lifetime for some things. To be able to love based on things other then outward beauty is one such lesson. It takes some of us a while to figure that out though. Your poem craftily says just that. I thought you did a wonderful job in penning your thoughts. I am glad you took the time to share it with us.
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The imagery in this is very striking and gives the reader a great mental picture as they read deeper into the poem. In life we meet many that we can become infatuated with but looking deeper into someones heart is the only way you can ever truelly get to know and understand someone those adding to the relationship. Well crafted piece however. Many thanks for joining my contest and good luck to you.
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Oh Bravo on your HM!
I totally agree with all that you wrote as too many times attraction is all infatuation which falls by the wayside with time. Getting to know someones heart is the best way to find love
A beautiful sensual write!
Thank you for sharing this in the group reading list and congratulations again on your HM
Jasmineros
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Wow wow wow!! I cant believe you wrote this. This is veery sensual and I really love it. Hope you ment every word
Good luck in the contest!!
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This piece was interesting. I have had these exact thoughts lately.
Great job.
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