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Oh Dan Dan, please don’t wipe away your tears of sorrow,
I will savour their memory when leaving forever tomorrow.
They’re God’s gift to wash away the pain of our last parting,
that is why He has caused, your brown eyes to be smarting.
An intimate friendship has been how we travelled our course,
there for each other in times of contentment, pain or remorse.
Recall how we journeyed together, to many a wondrous place,
where I admired your beauty and the loving looks on your face.
Our futures at a crossroad, as destiny casts the seeds she sows,
mine‘s retirement and yours is a career your caring heart chose.
My race has been run and out into lush peaceful paddocks I go,
but you’re starting your future; time for your mind to now grow.
So I will always remember these warm crystal tears as you cry,
for there’s no greater gift of affection than the tears of goodbye.
. One of six poems about the start and sad parting of myself and my best friend Dan Dan.
That Kiss. http://allpoetry.com/poem/2829286
The Last Goodbye. http://allpoetry.com/poem/3023340
Crystal Tears http://allpoetry.com/poem/3085772
Tears of Dust http://allpoetry.com/poem/3129730
A Rose of White. http://allpoetry.com/poem/3169832
Author notes
A true story about my friend Dan Dan who is a chinese student in Australia learning nursing and I left for greener pastures (yesterday) in my Motor Home while she prepares to study in earnest, for she must also learn english too.
Barry
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A contest entry
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700 points, ended December 24, 2008, 24 entries
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This part best brings out the great friendship you shared with Dan Dan, I think.
"Recall how we journeyed together, to many a wondrous place,
where I admired your beauty and the loving looks on your face."
It is wondrously pure.
Thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you!
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Another beautiful yet heartwrenching account of how you lost your friend. I am sorry that you had to learn what it feels like to have to say goodbye to someone you care for so much, even if its not through death.
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How beautiful!
This is very sincere and the flow is great!
Thanks for entering!
An intimate friendship has been how we travelled our course,
there for each other in times of contentment, pain or remorse.
Recall how we journeyed together, to many a wondrous place,
where I admired your beauty and the loving looks on your face. -
hey this is really good, good luck in everything that you face in life,
blessings
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Lovely [:
Thank you for entering
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Wow. This is indeed beautifully written. The words are so heartfelt and sincere. Almost made me want to cry. A wonderful piece of writing.
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Very heartfelt write you got here. I see you put a lot of emotion into this poem, an also I see you have a great imagination. Very goodluck in the contest an keep up the good work.
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A very interesting view point on the tears of goodbye...for me I think of tears as sorrow..not as affection. Very good write.
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very nice lots of luck
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Just wonderful and a true story to boot!
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very well written.
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nicely done
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quite mature and sincere. I liked it . Thansk and all the best.
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wonderful sentiment
the strength to find the good and wonderful part of good bye and you described your emotion so well with warm conviction . I enjoyed reading this good write
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Our futures at a crossroad, as destiny casts the seeds she sows,
mine‘s retirement and yours is a career your caring heart chose.
nice,reminds me of the words of an arabic song sang by Magda roumi,saying the birds are still singing,the bees still buzzing but now my friend what shall we do at crossroads,lovely write indeed -
Such a sad goodbye, but penned so beautifully and straight from the heart. A very lovely piece of work here from you Bazza. Well done and good luck in the contest with this truly beautiful write.
Shaz xx
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My race has run and out into lush peaceful paddocks I go, but you're starting your future
time for your mind to grow...
Last stanza- there's no greater gift of affection than the tears of goodbye...most beautiful, even a motto
Good luck in the contest
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Wonderful poem. I had to read it twice. I'm still not sure if she died or just moved away though
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Read the Author's notes.
The author's notes explain that she is studying nursing etc .. you must have missed it. Actually I beleiev the author's notes should prece the poem not after it as if fowarned, the flow is less disturbed . I have been doing this and it works much better.
Bazza
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Makes this even better that this is based on true accounts!
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wow this is a very wonderful poem!!!
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I loved it. You almost made me cry in the last stanza. I wish you good luck. Your's is one of my favorites.
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Barry my Friend
It's always a honor to read you writes. You always have interesting true stories of life. To many a good bye to a friend might not mean much. But to you, You make it a journey in life, a journey in learning. a journey in departing. A journey that will never really end. For that journey remains in you heart full of memories. You always bring your stories to life. And paint a picture of beauty even in the most smallest episodes of life. good luck in the contest (Lisa)
"My race has been run and out into lush peaceful paddocks I go,
but you’re starting your future; time for your mind to now grow.
So I will always remember these warm crystal tears as you cry,
for there’s no greater gift of affection than the tears of goodbye."
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very very nicely written.. a wonderful entry. Good luck.
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hi my dear daddy
It's a beautiful piece on a sad event. Saying goodbye is always hard, but when there's an openning, there'll be an end as well.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Sad, emotional, exciting, a mixture of emotions and views. I really like this piece
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Thankyou.
Glad you liked it and thanks for the comment.
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When we are lucky enough to share in such a friendship as this, tears to be shed are always inevitable!
A most moving and beautiful heartfelt poem about your friend Dan Dan A lovely tribute to all you hold in your heart!
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Jasminerose
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Thanks for the lovely comment and applause. I wish you well too. Take care.
Barry
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I especially enjoyed your phrase "warm chrystal tears".
This piece impressed me as reflections on a limited but enjoyed time shared between separate generations with different seasons ahead.
I think line 4 might flow as well without the comma after 'caused'. Stanza 5, last word probably meant to be 'sows'?
May both of your futures be very happy ones.
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So very very beautiful
There is no greater gift of affection than the tears of goodbye. How moved I was by this piece. A terrific entry. Best of luck. Just wonderful. ~Pamela
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Bazza what a joy it is to see your work in my contest.This is a beautiful loving piece Clearly expressing deep feelings held for the person the poem concerns.Parting while can be sad,it is my belief that one should reflect on the great fortune of the meeting.Many friends i knew have moved on but as long as the memories survive so does the friendship. Thank you for entering the contest All the very best
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Great to be here at last.
It is a joy and honour to be here mate ... lingering among the legends is pretty heady stuff. In the process of shiftin and as I missed the previous contest i was determined not to let you down this time. A little hurried and rough but at least I managed to submit.. Thanks mate for the words of welcome, comments and applause. Take care mate.
Barry
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So Heartfelt!!!!!!!!
Dear Barry, You told me of Dan Dan and I know you will miss each other. But as you tell me, we should always hold onto those beautiful memories and smile when we remember them. I smile much and remember plenty.
You are right, there’s no greater gift of affection than the tears of goodbye. Thank you for this amazing poem. I always admire your strength to move on and remember only the happy and forget the sad. 
God Bless you my sweet friend for always being here with a smile when I need one. Always here for you too. Sandy 
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ThrudderBaz.nk you Sandy for the lovely review and applause and I am happy that you enjoyed it and it could take your mind (if only a short time) off your daily problems and heartache. take care
BruddaBaz
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Very Hearfelt Dear Bazza!!!!
Hello my sweet friend You words are so caring and full of compassion. You are such a blessing and always lift my spirits. Love your smile my friend and your thoughtfulness. Hugs to you. Sandy
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A loving tribute.
I find this is a loving tribute to one who has decided to excel in her education. I know she will be successful because determined people do succeed.
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Dear Bazza
A sweet, poetic story, great imagery and rhyming, flows beautifully and sad that you have to part ways but there is growth in sorrow. It leaves space in the heart for joy to enter. I think that is how it goes. Great write my friend. Best wishes in the competition.
Hugs and love,
Petratani
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