I stand naked before you
a bastards blood in
a widowers blood out
death is your vanity
and lack of compassion
You burn me
you taint my inner strength
you fed me with fable and ire
you created this fantastic flame
and tho i pour my life's breath
i amount to the scandal
that begat life
Ill spell this out for you
with improper gramerical usage
I should have been named Fuck Up
laying there knees to chest
still in the womb, paralyzed fetal
ill never grow up to be your little boy
for as your maverick or black bird
i lay down and died long ago
my Father oh my beautiful dad
you wanted not more than the fuck
you took that catholic school girl
and taught her what "love" was
was it in the basement,
or in a crackhouse i was concieved?
What have you ever intended?
Or by blunder, by sorrow, mended?
and my memory, it holds everything
every lock and key
i loved you once, my sickness, my abuse
worse than carsogenic pathogens
and you handed me over to fall apart
you gave me to her said you did your best
will you ever understand?
would it make you want to kill yourself too?
that i cried and cry and im learning to live
it wasnt the torture or your immature wife
you simply were the supernova i worshiped
(Come up with threes and Holy Trinities
and count ten thousand years
as a bank does cash
Examine it as a tree leaf
or some abandoned young)
Disconnected
Disenchanted
We are not Whole.
The only way ill fix it
my life in death, my antibiotic
my cure from your phychotic
is to wade right through all this shit
pain and poison till youre purged
scrape my veins clean of your retrovirus
stop apoligizing
im sorry but i wanted you
and youre gone now
So here.
Die from me
Let me be
No pain, no life, no sense of feeling
there is no greater loss of love or forgivness or surrender
Accept this Meine Father:
-Ich bin Afterkind.-
You will not be
Die even in memory
The world will fall
but you will never know me
nomatter how loud you call
I do not know you
I do not hear you.
Please tell me what you think
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I'm intrigued
I found this interesting.. I absolutely love the last two lines.. so simple yet so powerful.. great write
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That was really painful to read. In a good way though. I mean it really broke my heart.
I had to look up some of those words in the dictionary...but everything else was really cool
Like most girls, I'd have to say I run mostly on emotions, and this was just one of those pieces that makes me feel emotional.
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Wow. I'm only fourteen, with not a very large vocabulary, but... this is excellent. I could read in between all the big words... haha. and i found this a masterpiece. i love this.
how come YOU get to be the one who can write excellent poetry?
lucky..
anyways.
i loved this and good luck in the contest.
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So, you're not following through with your plan, or was this just so it would fit the contest?
I like your use of language in this and you made the word bank fit nicely into the poem; they didn't feel out of place to your own vocabulary.
The ending really caps off the piece, and I like the use of repetition; it leaves the poem feeling whole and complete.
Good job, and good luck in the contest.
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yuppers, change of plan methinks. hehe. iunno.. spur of the moment.. but there was some thought involved. i dont wanna be in the contest i dont think. im judging the females.. not cool. i just felt compelled to write.
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