That did not sting enough,
Why don't you give me another,
"Shut the Fuck Up"
Maybe I could gain a few pounds,
than you can kindly compare me to a cow.
Honey, I'm being stupid, please slap me around
I forgot to buy beer, push me to the ground
I'll make it easy- here is my head.
The children are still not in bed.
Sorry dinner was late,
here is your plate to throw in my face.
I want you to cover me with your stink.
I found some whiskey, for you to drink.
Rot in hell, can you taste your death.
Finally you will be dead and I can rest.
Author notes
A little sarcastic dark humor, not intended to offend anyone. I wrote this poem because of a friend I new and she said that by staying with that pig this is what she was doing. The ending well I just decided it needed to be that way.
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This is very good. Sad that this goes on in some women's lives. No one deserves such treatment. I like the sarcastic spin you put on such a painful subject.
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yep that is the way things can be in a marriage, wher if things are not just so for the man, the wife gets a verbal beating or the real thing and when she takes the time to think about what happen and is not healing she feels like it is all her fault and he was only doing what he had a right to do.
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Good work. I can hear the sarcasm throughout the poem. you did good writing it. good job. I really like it. keep it up! and good luck in my contest!
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Fighting fire with fire hey?
I really liked this
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Line eleven:
"through" should be "throw"
Line twelve:
"too" should be "to"
Best of luck
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Thank you for pointing out my errors. I really appreciate it
Most people dont take the time.
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You're welcome
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Your friend needs to leave, while she can still walk. This crap makes me sick to my stomach. Good poem though...Scott
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Ouch!
I bet this hits home with many!
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
(sorry about the pun)
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DAMN that was perfect. its what every person going thru this thinks at some point. this is really ..... hmmmm a good point of view. i liked it alot and i liked how it rhymed. some parts were a little stressed but its a great write
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Well I belive you got your point across on that poem. I think someone better come with roses doing his very best to enamour you or he will be sleeping on the couch.
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Love the ending... very creative.
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well written...but so controlling, hard to believe these people exist...
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