The world was cut
The Inner City bleached
and the spectacular sunsets
no longer shimmer
We run from marbles
and throw flat bread
across the ocean
[trying to reach Thebes]
How
long
ago
the world
fell down
Last night we talked
in shadows to the Medici,
discussing vainglorious dreams
God, gold and glory
In Pompeii we settle ideas
under iron, blood and ash
caressing putrid lambs
Here we touch the putrid lambs
putrid lambs, putrid lambs
here we touch the putrid lambs
fleece as black as death
Let's look for an approving God
the blonde Assassin of our dreams
beheads our song
In vainglory we are lost
Forgive us Father
Come, see the world end
and listen to it's whimper
Passing bells and ringing knells
listen to the death
Candles flicker, candles extinguish
with the gentle breath
and the drawing of the blinds
to hide what's left behind
Lilies blow
storms come
and the world ends
O! Fortuna!
Let us descend
into the underworld
underneath the world of
the consciousness
and let us watch
the dead float
on the River
the rancid River
Let us watch
the world end
in silence
Author notes
I'm a rambling guy.
This poem is too long to provide the allusions within the time frame that I have right now. If you would like some notes to the poem please IM me. Thank you.
A contest entry
- Ramble On, My Friend! by zhaniswolf.
375 points, ended June 4, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well, I am sure there is much in this I have missed, but I found it beautiful. You always allude to the Bible, which is a favourite literary mine of mine (mine of mine...what a stupid thing to say!). I would go on, but surely you understand that you are talented. All I can say is keep on nurturing you gift. You have a natural knack with words and, enviably, a very literary ability with allusion.
I love the T. S. Eliot feel of this - 'This is how the world ends, not with a bang, but a whimper'....or something like that, I don't have it to hand.
Anyhoo
Good work,
K. F.
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interesting poem. that's not a bad thing, i just don't know what to say. good luck in my contest.
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I don't need the notes Nate... I think this was a great poem... absolutely amazing... even if I was too blond to get some of it! hehe! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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