Cut when your mad
Cut when your sad
You can cut tommorow
You can cut your sorrows
You can cut your arms
You can cut your legs
You can cut your feelings
You can cut your soul
but all they call you is
Emo
Author notes
I know this poem is weird but what the hell might as well write it.
Please tell me what you think
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Very true. I can't STAND the labels. All they do is hurt
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I really like the last two lines of this poem because it is really true, a lot of people don't understand what is going on and instead of investigating, they just label you. A suggestion: perhaps I would change the length of the lines a bit, while flow is nice, the lines are so short it begins to feel a bit choppy.
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YOUR: a possessive. "your cat is grey."
YOU'RE: you are. "you're not dating him, are you?"
I like how truthful this is. We all tend to label each other, and it is sad that people who have real issues with self-mutilation are lumped into the category of "emo/goth/whatever." While a lot of people in the "emo" subculture cut because it's cool, it's really not fair to the ones who have real problems.
Anyway, sorry for the rambling and onto the poem: it might be more effective if you didn't repeat "you can cut..." so much. There are a lot of ways to say what you just said, so experiment!
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that is so ture
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Perfect
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I love it... soo deep and gawd most have been there! xx
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I hate that word. Emo. Oh god so stupid. in the first two lines it should be "you're" and not "your". and in the 7th line, shouldn't it be "you can cut your feelings" ? Just a guess, because I just feel like something is missing.
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Thanks
Thanks um i forgot the word cut in line 7 and i just realized that like a week after i wrote the poem!anyway thanks
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I totally understand it. No one understands the pain people go through. And if you cut they automatically call you Emo. Nice write.
~~~Vampy~~~
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