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[The "It" Girl.]

Wishes and dreaming and thoughts,
Thoughts filled of nothing one could ever hope to understand.

Incomprehensible.

A bird,
Wistful and graceless-
Sitting on a branch waiting,
Waiting for minutes to turn to hours
And to pass by the changes.

Changing is a waste of time,
A waste of energy.
Lights and sparkles captured in the sky,
Full of a velvet blanket paint canvas.
A never changing story,
Dating back to since forever.

Love forever.

Don’t ask for answers.
Wait to listen.
Form the words on the tips of the tongues,
Let them roll off in beads of sweat.
Forget it,
Don’t bother taking it back,
Don’t bother remembering.
It’s not worth it.
Not worth it.
Failure.

Empty leaves the room for more,
But when change is an unforgivable sin
In a mind,
Empty will stay empty forever. 

Triumphs and victories.
Try again,
Try, try again.
Useless words,
Left in the wind – Empty. 

See the past, View the present,
Remembrance is the key.
Hold the key,
Use the key.
Try the future,
Look to the future.

The only hope.

Ignore the rest.

Make it.
Want it.
Love it. 

Author notes

This is a poem for a contest about "me" in an OBE. I can't use any pronouns though.

It's describing my thoughts, The world around me, and how I am in words. :]


renizzle's contest: option 4.

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  • mufrafra
    July 1, 2007
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    wow

    i lik it, so poetic and creative


  • renizzle
    June 6, 2007

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    I really love this. The use of words, though simple, are very powerful. You really captured the essence of you without writing some kind of biography. Creative and poetic. Thank you for entering!


  • TheDemonEve
    May 31, 2007

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    I like this. You really convey hopelessness and why you think change is not all it is cracked up to be.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • Sofia Nadia
    May 30, 2007

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    interesting

    i see a lot of talent here, but i feel that some of it is a little misused. i dont know you, but i feel like i've entered your thoughts. which is good! however, i am also looking for the obvious things that make you you. ie: selfish or generous, friendly or lonely. i didn't get all of that from this. you have a nice connection with words though.

    "Lights and sparkles captured in the sky,
    Full of a velvet blanket paint canvas."

    my favorite line. thanks so much for entering and good luck!!
    ~SofiNadi

    • They Say Shannon
      May 30, 2007
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      I tried to enter the chat, but you kept just saying "hello" hah. I guess you didn't see me?

      And the reason I did this is because I didn't want to be cliche.
      I'm not into the whole... Let's just list, "generous, nice, and wonderfully kind," thing.
      I was hoping for something more original. :]

      But that's okay, I'm glad with how it turned out.
      Thanks!

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