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Poems Three

 

Heaven’s Gate - Rictameter

 

Sheer joy

At Heaven’s gate

Forever here on earth

With peace and serenity

Home of my sister is of where I speak

Tall pines fresh air and hummingbirds

That is where my heart lies

Purest nature

Sheer joy

 

 

 

Sweet Georgia - Lantourne

 

 

Wait

For me

Sweet Georgia

I will return

Soon

 

 

 

 

Left Behind - Retourne

 

Tall pines I have left far behind

Cool shade and soft pine covered road

Gentle breeze blows across my path

As I listen to nature’s song.

 

Cool shade and soft pine covered road

The road leading back home to you

Wind through the tall pines lead me home

Back to you and my hearts true joy.

 

Gentle breeze blows across my path

Sweet musty scent of our panther

She follows us but never seen

Feel her watchful and cautious glare.

 

As I listen to nature’s song

The chirping birds and screeching owl

Chickens cackling the rooster crows

Hummingbirds wings soft drumming beat.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Rictameter-syllable count 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, first and last line the same.

Lantourne-syllable count 1-2-3-4-1

Retourne-Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.

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  • layla.
    October 27, 2007
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    i'm keeping this for further consideration


  • Shahrazad
    October 2, 2007

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    Thanks for educating me about retournes- I never heard of them and they seem quite fun- I must try one someday. These were very lovely writes- I could tell that they came from the heart.


    • freespirit51
      October 2, 2007
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      Thanks so much for your wonderful words. I am glad you enjoyed them and that the love I flet came through in my words. Two of the pictures I took when I spent 8 days in Georgia with my Cheyenne sister Tender Wolf. I feel in love with Georgia and hated to leave. These were written shortly after I returned home.


  • joyya
    June 4, 2007

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    This is lovely so full of spirit and nature. I enjoy nature it is my inspiration. Beautiful, Dear Poet, Beautiful.

    • freespirit51
      June 4, 2007
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      Thanks so much for your wondeful words. Eight days with my Big Sister Tender Wolf inspired much of my latest pieces.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 1, 2007

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    The way you wrote this poem is truly amazing but the words out shine them all...makes me miss you all the moreA true winner in every-way


    • freespirit51
      June 1, 2007
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      Thank you my Sister for your wnderful words. I am so glad you enjoyed this piece of my heart I left behind,


  • Jessica Lyndsay
    June 1, 2007

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    I am awwed at how your poems fow and they look so diffucult to write i think you have extreme talent keep up the good work

    • freespirit51
      June 1, 2007
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      Thanks so mch blueeyedangel for your encouraging words. it was a real joy to write these as they come straight from the heart.


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 31, 2007

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    Impressive

    I could not write in such forms. I am in awe of your ability to do so. I am lucky enough to be able to write Haikus and acrostics. I am not brave enough to attempt the more difficult forms of poetry. Perhaps one day I will try my hand at some.

    Thanks for the read

    God Bless
    Tammy

    • freespirit51
      June 1, 2007
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      Tammy thanks so much for your kind words. I spent 9 wonderful days with my Sister Tender Wolf and her family in the beauties of nature. I was well inspired.

  • in-the-twilight
    May 30, 2007

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    This is really good... wow... these forms are hard for me to do and I admire that you can write them so beautifully! Rock on! xoxo Meg


    • freespirit51
      June 1, 2007
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      Thanks for your very kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed the piece.


  • debilynn gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    that sounds quite difficult although you make it look so easy. thank you for sharing this and for entering. God bless you always


    • freespirit51
      May 30, 2007
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      Thanks so much for your kind words. I enjoyd the challenge of the write alot.

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