I look back upon the field of strife
That led me to my downfall.
This eternal pit of emptiness
Is the shadow I’ll leave of my life.
Always pursuing the unjust man,
Was my glorious occupation;
But was I right in this exploit
Or was it, at conception, damned?
Constantly the ghost that held back
And tracked down his every move,
Good deeds were done (in pity’s sake)
To make up for the character he lacked.
Yet, in the end…it was HE who won,
And I am left here in shame
Wondering if I should continue my life
Or end it now and be done.
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One little jump,
Just one…
And I shall leave this dying world
Forever.
Author notes
Les Miserables from the viewpoint of "Javerre" (my favorite character!)
A contest entry
- Best All Round Poet 2007 _ Last Round -- ♥Invite Only♥ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
1800 points, ended June 5, 2007, 9 entries
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Outstanding
This is full of sadness and melancholy. I thought you created the character very well in this and all the poetry.I liked how you concentrated on his thoughts and feelings and at the same time created such a visual poem, full of reflection and emotion.
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This sounds like a very sad film. I must go see this one as well (phew, i'm going to be busy with all these films. I am glad I didn't let anyone else into the finalist lists otherwise I'd have more films to view). He sounds like a very lonely, desparate character. The Miserable, I presume is the translation? Sounds interesting and kind of confusing but in a good way.
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Wow, i'm just stunned. That really does sound like Javerre. You did really well here, he seems to come alive in your words. It's absolutely awesome!!!!!
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wow, such strong emotions. GREAT POEM! =)
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wow... strong write.... and i loved the rhyme of the 1st and 4th lines... it was so subtle i didn't even pick it up until the third stanza, then i had to go back and re read... well done. very emotional, pulling you in to the feelings of despair... this probably wasn't a good one to read right before bed.
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Intriguing
Makes me want to read the book!
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you should! it's one of my favorites...
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I'll add it to the readig list this summer!
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well.. this pretty much rocks... im going to have to read it again cuz im really tired and i missed most of the beginning.. but even then the ending was really powerful!!! .. just one little jump
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Powerful poem which captures a very powerful scene and viewpoint. To be caught in such a crossfire must be so terrible, and while I've been caught in a few of them, I've never had thoughts like this! You captured them well, though, and wrote them in a way that made me feel like I was the character you were speaking of. Such a strong change of emotion, such a feel of being torn. Excellent job on this.
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wwwoowwww, there goes my happy mood. lol. this was fabulous. i love it! i am just about to start reading Les Miserables, so i will probably be coming back and reading it again, with a more meaningful comment. this is great just from my current point of view.
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