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Sweet scent of danger
Lingers within the forest~
Be still racing heart
Frozen snow crunches
Lurking closer to my lair~
Hide little ones, hide
Blare of thunder rings
Scurry, death is imminent~
Child's voice now silent
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Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
In a list
A contest entry
- Chain Haiku's of Nature VI with added twist of a Double tanka (Must be a group member to enter, apply within) by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended June 6, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Aww, this leaves such nice gentle caring thoughts. I see deer in my yard everyday and their little ones get caught behind the fence not knowing how to get around it. I see their mother come back and get them. The imagery in your poem feels so life like,,I can see why you got the gold.
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Hey Linda!
This is a very touching write. Very beautifully written from the point of view of the deer. Wonderful imagery.
Harrisham Minhas
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Thank you!
Thank you so very much Harrisham for your wonderful inspiring comment
I am so glad that you enjoyed this one!
Thank you
Linda
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As a new haiku-ist, I do not feel competent to judge the structure, but the imagery is wonderful.
Well wishes in the contest.
Thank you for sharing.
rous
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Thank you!!
Hello Rous
Your comments mean a great deal to me, whether or not you are new to this form
I am glad that you thought my imagery to be wonderful and I really do appreciate hearing your thoughts at anytime
It is nice to meet you
Linda
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You are quite welcome.
rous
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Great imagery and emotion in this piece deer.
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I like it!
This is an awesome haiku chain you have written Linda
I believe you have hit the nail on the head with this one.My favorite line is,"Be still racing heart"
Thank you for sharing the magnificent piece with us and best of luck in the contest.
Don
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Thank you!
Awww Don
You are too sweet in your compliments
Thank you so very much!!
I know it is a bit sad but, I was looking at it from a different perspective this time
Have to stop watching Bambi or I'll never hunt again..lol
Thanks again, I am so glad you enjoyed this
Linda
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Awwww Jazzy,
This one is touching...beautiful...awww
Very well done! Wish you all the very best! -
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Thank you!
Thank you Sandy
You always give me agreat big smile with your comments! I guess I had Bambi on the mind when writing this one.. So glad you enjoyed it!
Thanks again my dear friend
Jazzy
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