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I Love You Dad

I Love You Dad

Ever since I was young, you taught me love
Things that you taught me came only from you
When I was confused, I looked for my Dad

As I grew older, I looked to you Dad
And in subtle ways you gave me your love
Being always sincere, I put my trust in you

So now I am grown and I still love you
You stood by me, I’m so proud of you Dad
Rock solid as always, I count on your love

I can’t tell you how much, I love you Dad

 

 

 

 

Author notes

( composed in Iambic pentameter )
Tritina
Being modeled from the Sestina, there is no rhyme scheme, instead it comprises of three stanzas using the same three words in a Sestina like pattern, and a final line which uses the three words in the starting sequence:

A.. B.. C...
C.. A.. B...
B.. C.. A...
A,B,C...

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  • StarEyes
    August 14

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    Sis,

    Thanks for sharing this in your lesson plan. This so reminded me of my feelings for my dad! Reminds me of a few of the things I miss most about him! I love this one!

    Great job on this one!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Zeprina-Jaz
    January 7
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    It seems a complex form of poem, but it's worth it: this poem is very touching. Good write.


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    Nice...

    ...now I see what you mean in the lesson, and will go and do what I can!


  • lianonsidhe silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    Hi
    Loved this totally!
    My father was a very kind and lovely man. Sadly he has passed away, and so the sentiments in your poem are quite special. I wish I could read it to him now.
    The line:
    'When I was confused I looked for my Dad', really captures the way I felt as a child. I thought he could fix any problem, mend any toy and there was nothing he couldn't do in my eyes.
    Wonderful!


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    May 25, 2008

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    A lovely tribute for your Dad, makes me wish I could care for mine like this but alas, ain't gonna happen

    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Swan song gold member
    June 16, 2007

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    That is a perfect Father's day card well done I like this form obviously you took to it also. Excellent job!


  • sunny day
    May 31, 2007

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    This is absolutely beautiful and a form that I haven't tried yet. I will have to look into it more. Your love for your dad is expressed so wonderfully and clearly in this piece. You reached into my heart and I can say not only are you proud of your dad, he must be very proud of you. Thank you for sharing your beauty as always. Another brilliant piece and I wish you the best in the contest. It sounds golden. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      May 31, 2007

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      Thank you Joyce, I agree it's a mini Sestina. I don't know who invented it but it's perfect for some poems.


  • PerVirtuous
    May 30, 2007

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    Wonderful write. I am so proud you are spreading your light beyond the realm of AP. I am giving thanks. Three bunnies.


  • Desire gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    Aaaaaaaw Dangggggggg!!!

    This is one Precious piece You have penned
    Love the form You use-Form Queen
    and spoken from the Heart
    Thank You for sharing this Gem!!!
    What an Honor
    Just Gorgeous

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    A lovely testament of your love to your Dad, Dollface...And My hats off to him as well for making such a splendid friend in my life...Forever teaching me is you at the end of the sentence!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    a VERY NICE WRITE FOR YOUR DAD, as I KNOW HE IS AS PROUD OF YOU AS I AM! (only thing is, I give you better parts of the kill. ) LOL!



    Dad


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 30, 2007
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  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is a lovely tribute to your dad and I'm sure he'll be proud of it. The form is one I haven't seen before, I'll have to look it up and give it a try. Replenished bunnies and I give you 3 hugs too. Love you sis

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