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The Reported Death of a Poet

 

 

 

 

On a Wednesday afternoon

in the rain,

at Lostock Station,

they found her broken bones

& battered books:



 

 

The careful way in which they stepped

over her, placating her wounds

never knowing;

she had gnawed the bones

of Byron and Yeats, had sunk Shakespeare

deep in her mid-summer pelvis of aging

& bloody loss,

the letting out of woman



 

How would they know:

their ivory pens

and nibbed nibs protruded

like a fake penises lost inside faux pas pants 

and heavily stained paper-mache mouths

just mumbled, this and that.

Soaking wet by the railway track

on Wednesday, in the rain

under the fibreglass roof

under her sieved eyes

and her brailled mind

             that bled to the ticket-master.







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  • cvillelisa
    July 11, 2007

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    I think this one definitely. I was looking for it first off.


  • patsoldcat
    June 6, 2007

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    wow

    a moving and powerful write, violent suicide is what i see, perhaps i find her lost and alone, for she was different and this was her choice of life ultimate.
    i am saddend that i never knewher.


  • Wandika gold member
    June 2, 2007

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    The mundane have far too little depth to appreciate a well read poet.

    A stunning write for the book. How is it progressing my dear? Anxious to get my hands on an autographed copy. I will pick it up in person!

    Jim


  • truembrace
    June 2, 2007

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    sometimes it is so very obvious to me, that as writers, only a few Poets can give us a snapshot of every single thing we need in order to put the whole picture together. Were there a gnat on the wall here - I imagine you would have swatted her for us.

    Another solid musing of yours that brings us thickly into a scene with sharp tones, the knowing of the person, the details to be touched - if only we could.

    what was the word AJ used again?

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    June 1, 2007

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    A thought provoking piece of poetry well penned,perhaps the letter "a" before fake penises is a typo?This piece is brimming with emotion and imagery,the passion of the author was revealed,even in the throes of death she shows that a true poet would be thinking about the words they left behind and the words of those that tried to analyse them and failed,the longing to be judged not on what is seen but what is felt is keenly felt and takes the reader to similar thoughts,who would revere bits of paper and thoughts of oughts,warts and all when coming across my cadaver,no one,the paper would be processed along with the body and everything would be seen to have been done but it leaves a legacy of sadness to have not been truly known on all levels,especially liked the phrase "her brailled mind" indicative not of blindness but of a mind constantly tapping out words on tangents,though this is a sombre piece tis not depressing,it still allows the reader to appreciate the skill with which it is constructed and it reaches into the psyche of the self,well done indeed,as ever a pleasure to read you.


  • Trellis
    May 31, 2007
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    There is always so much more depth to what is actually "reported." You have illustrated that here. You remind us that each life has many facets which sometimes do not cast their light in all directions.

    Very impressive writing!

    Cris


  • drunknmindsobrheart
    May 31, 2007

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    wow this was amazing


    I loved it


    i loved some of the words used


    amazing

    !!!!!!!!


  • Uckerhead
    May 31, 2007

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    Well done.

    Disurbing but in a good in your face reality sort of way. Descrptions dark explaining a loss that went without recognition. Keep on writing.


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 31, 2007
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    "they found her broken bones
    & battered books:

    The careful way in which they stepped
    over her, placating her wounds
    never knowing;"

    Stark, deeply touching & hauntingly lovely, Gill...A vivid depiction of the sorrowful end of a well~lived life...Gorgeous penning, my Friend... Wanda


  • HonorablyFallen silver member
    May 31, 2007

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    i like the very start of this , it moves back and forth like avoiding puddles . Its heavy and thick I think we all were having trouble seeing through the steam rolling off the track. Wonderful and interesting
    -Sarahlynn


  • Elrenia
    May 31, 2007

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    Hmmm, very deep. There is so much that can be read in this. The mindframe of the reader will take this to places you may not have intended; I like that.
    Lovely piece and very well penned.

    Thank you for sharing.

    rous


  • tlsledge
    May 31, 2007
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    Very interesting poem. The lines are woven with careful thought. I reallly liked these lines:
    The careful way in which they stepped
    over her, placating her wounds
    never knowing;
    she had gnawed the bones
    of Byron and Yeats, had sunk Shakespeare
    deep in her mid-summer pelvis of aging
    & bloody loss,
    the letting out of woman


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 31, 2007

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    Hi, a sad story and well written, happens far to often in the world we live in, I always say ,if not for the grace of God go I, is it a true story by any chance? I found this poem heart renching,Di

  • cvillelisa
    May 30, 2007
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    The final stanza IS really something. The sounds are amazing. And the ending line is so very good.

    There is anger in this poem -- I sense it mixed in with a tired sadness.



    Such a caring person you are Nurse Chilly.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    Fuckinominal Gill...

    final stanza throws imagery around like Dylan's "tambourine man"

    great stuff...


  • Musimwa
    May 30, 2007

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    Great Poem!

    I am touched by the imagery. Lol, it is good. Thank u for sharing it. Remember the sky is the limit. Good nite


  • misselaineous
    May 30, 2007
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    faux pas pants
    this is not in the least pants
    its lubblyjubbly


  • Cat gold member
    May 30, 2007
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    absolutely excellent

  • Lisa Haslett
    May 30, 2007

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    Good Poem

    Very sad poem I liked it!Good words and background,Keep on writing and wonderful bits of imagination very good Keep up the good work!Very good though Lisa K haslett Raytown missouri1

  • tara wilson gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is so sad, I love the middle part. Wonderful bits of imagery in this one Although a little gory, yes


  • faded dreams
    May 30, 2007

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    I'm a little confused. I think maybe I've not read this right. I can feel the heaviness in this. Perhaps if I reread a few times. I think part of it is the dark type against the black background. Maybe lighten the text a little or reverse the colors.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 30, 2007
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    Well penned here

    Very sad and the feel of the loss was awesome

  • Rowan gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is soo fine, the stark imagery provokes a sad reverency in me. I loved the way it started, and the way the story of this woman's life and demise has simply woven itself around me, it's raining here, so it seems to resonate even deeper..Loved it.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 30, 2007
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      Thank you so much...
      there is something about rain though ...

  • Suzanne Dia
    May 30, 2007

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    This is sad. The symbolism creates an ache for me, really. I donno, maybe it's not intended symbolism? But her death reminds me of when Guinevere hopped the wagon and left me. Lonely, words only offer so much comfort, and when we read these dead poets they never offer compassion even when we feel it for them. A cold way to live and die.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 30, 2007
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      I've been on overdose training today... grim stuff at best... ... so, things got a little morbid..

      but yes.. there was a need to bury some things.. and they say... fuck it!! ...

      tis all okay.. nowt bad here (home, that is)

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