your smile ripples on my lips
oh shyness is not nested
statue is not tasted
these cheeks move because of his
oh could kindness spread back
Author notes
use only words, please, poet
abridged from inspiration...
Comments
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You could disregard the last sentence in the comment below, if you feel like it. I think I just figured it out. Well played, well played.
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pleasant
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I loved the way you worked with meter, especially the fourth line. The spondee was perfectly appropriate. I was a little confused as to why you decided to make the last line 6 syllables rather than 8, which was how I read the first line. It'd be super duper if you could explain this to me. -
this is just beautiful. it almost shimmers of the page with peaceful happy. very pretty write.


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