I'm tired of it.
Tired of “I met the perfect guy for you,”
Tired of three seats in a movie theater,
I'm just tired.
I want that.
I want someone to confide in,
I want someone to hold me tight,
But it's like a fist to the gut.
It sickens me.
Sickens me to hold someone's hand,
Sickens me to give a hug,
I am sick.
Author notes
My meager and crude attempt to write about my phobia: the fear of being touched and how it isolates me. I wasn't trying to write in any particular style of poetry, I was just writing. So, I suppose it's freestyle.
option 5 for lucylightning. and i did read the rules, i just can't remember what i'm supposed to put here. Something about you & me...
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Sounds like a great word Cly. Whatever it's supposed to mean. Also came over as a deeply personal sort of poem.
By the way Cly, if you're still around. Bit of good news. As a one time fan of Cedric Ventures, you may perhaps be interested to know that it's up and zooming again. If you want, you can get the latest exploits by typing CedricDempNQ2 into Find Author.
Regards Ced
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I have noooooo clue how to pronounce the title but I think you express yourself very well. Blunt but nicely stated in a way that can be comprehended by the masses.
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Wow, such strong emotions in this poem. I guess you'd have to have some strong emotions for a phobia. I enjoyed this poem very much. Though I took a different perspective before I read your note, I still enjoyed it.
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Thank you for the comment.
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This was very sad.
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but enjoyable definitely!
thank you for reading the rules. lol.
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good job!!
Tired of “I met the perfect guy for you,”
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this is really good. nice write keep up the good work and im sure one day you will over come this phobia
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not so meager or crude! it's a great write, made me wonder what you were trying to portray. now i see what what you must face, and you did a great job of showing a every emotional hurdle in your life.
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great poem.
Amber
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great job! love this piece...and you captured that phobia quiet well: perhaps thats whats the matter with me...i have those same feelings...you want to touch but when the time comes, you can't bring yourself to do it...i dunno...good luck in the contest, though...
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Thank you. Your comment is much appreciated as is any praise. As far as your having this phobia I can't say. It seems to be different for everyone.
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