I’ll never forget the look in your eyes
as you hesitated by the door
The sadness in your eyes said it all
that look will be with me forever more
“I thought we were gonna make it” you said
the look of love before you turned away
I wanted to tell you not to leave
don’t go, but my pride got in the way
I stood in silence as you opened the door
I knew if you left we’d be through
And still I said nothing to those sad eyes
what I should have done, I didn’t do
If I could turn back the hands of the clock
to that one single moment in time
I’d never let you go as I did then
I’d still be yours and you’d be mine
Now even though my days have gone on
and new love has come to my life
I still look back with much sad regret
and wish we were still husband and wife
I can still see that look in your eyes
still see you, as you stand at the door
The look that will haunt me forever
and a love that is lost evermore
Dee Garner
© May 30, 2007
Author notes
He's gone now, passed away a few years ago, alone and lonely. We never stopped loving each other. He continued to be my dear friend to the end.
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A contest entry
- What Would You Change? #1 by The Poetic Bandits.
550 points, ended June 16, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Its such a beautiful and honest poem..
and,
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Thank you for writing this poem about your life and what happened to you. I know it must have been really hard to write, but maybe someday I (or someone else who read this poem) will be in that same situation you were in, remember this poem, and say, "No, you know what? I'm not going to let my pride stand in the way. I'm going to take to heart what Dee was telling me and stop him from walking out of my life."
That's the awesome thing about writing. We have the chance to tell others what happened to us and then they can learn from our experiences. God never wastes pain, and I think that He will use your story to touch other people's lives.
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Bandit Congrats!
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Oh this is so sadly penned, why do we have this pride thing within us, we spite ourselves sometimes...you should have listened to your heart and not your head, but that is easy to say now
...I am thrilled you both remained friends, but so sorry that he has since passed away...
You have expressed your feelings so very honestly and sincerely in this poem, it has made a tear come to my eye as I read your words...thank you for this most precious write, with it's wonderful rhyme and flow
~Lilac
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Wow this is a heart breaker. I like how you wrote this it had such strong emotion in it. It broke my heart. Sometimes pride just gets in the way of unsaid words. I can not say what I truly like. It just touched my heart very well done.
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I can definitely relate to this. It is true what they say...that pride cometh before the fall...
Hugs...Eddy
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Such a sad poem -and you are left with those wishes that you could change that day, so things would have turned out differently. We all havae those regrets. Sentiments well expressed in these lines.
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This is such a sad piece. I'm sorry he passed away The rhyme was powerful here.
Thanks for your comment. (Weird, thought I'd commented on this piece, I've read it before)
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Oh how sad. This is an endearing testiment to 'what could have been'. One never knows just how today's snap decision might affect our lives down the road. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Very nice. I love the story that you told here although it is sad you did a wonderful job expressing both feelings..Good luck in the contest
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Full Poetic Bandit Applause yayyyy!!!
Hi and welcome to the contest
...thanks for your super contribution, I wish you the best of luck
~Lilac~
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I am glad you remained friends~ You have a great gift to convey a story along with the poetic blend. You did a FANTASTIC JOB!!!
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great scenery. you are wonderful at this. loely writing
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sad regret...
Thank you for making the eyes of this old cynic mist over! I love the construction of this work and the imagery evoked.
Good luck with the contest!
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a sad piece, i guess many of us can relate to this poem for many of us have let love slip away, in hindsight we can play scenes a thousand times, what if i had spoken then or acted then with a kiss and a hug. the sighs of life. a good poem
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hi my lovely mom
What can I say here? You've told everything in your poem.
Love you
May he rest in peace.
Shahrzad
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Oh no...this is so sad! Each poem I read in this contest just makes me sadder and sadder!
I truly feel for you ~ your author's notes are particularly tragic...summing up everything in your poem, and more. Really sad...
You have shown strength in writing about it so valiantly. Best of luck with this piece. Judging will be so HARD!
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