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A Song Just For You

I've been thinking about you
Trying so hard not to hide
All these feelings and emotions
Building up here deep inside

It's not so unusual
it's just me I guess
But when I'm around you
I turn out such a mess

If I was an artist
I could draw you a theme
But the best I could do
Is to try and say what I mean
But I'm not that clever
At what I do
So I've put pen to paper
To write a song just for you...

Some people can say it
The way they want it to
But for me words don't come easy
When I'm here right next to you

I guess I'm a little tongue tied
It's just who I am
A little confused and frightened
And not what I planned

If I was an artist
I could draw you a theme
But the best I could do
Is to try and say what I mean
But I'm not that clever
At what I do
So I've put pen to paper
To write a song just for you...

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  • Beatles Girl
    April 9, 2008

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    This is so sweet and heartfelt. I know exactly what you mean. When I first met my fiance I literally tripped over my own feet.... and fell flat on my face. Hehe. Great write.


  • second-born
    November 22, 2007

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    I love this…a simple and sincere song that would truly melt the hearts of the ones being serenaded…I like the chorus so much…thank you for sharing a fantastic write…


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 6, 2007

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    Well written piece, very easy to relate not being able to say or to tell how you feel.

    Good write and congrats on bronze.


  • warrior-eagle
    October 4, 2007

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    But for me words don't come easy
    When I'm right next to you

    Aw. this is sweet. This is an awesome write.


  • Shirley Shaw
    July 29, 2007

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    Excellente'

    Very COOL, And Very well written. I Enjoyed it Very Much.Great Write.'God Bless'.Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo.....


  • Maddogk
    June 18, 2007

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    This is great.. Has the rhyme and rythmn that has singers excercising vocal cords.. Has a fantastic feel about it..
    Well done and good luck..

    Jeffro


  • Shapla
    June 17, 2007

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    "It's not so unusual
    it's me I guess
    But when I'm around you
    I turn out such a mess"

    I think this is how everyone feels when around his or her love.A truly beautiful piece.

  • aboutface
    June 9, 2007

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    Critical comment:

    "I've thinking about you" = 'I have' thinking about you'

    doesn't make much sense


  • halleluja
    June 6, 2007

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    Beautiful write! Loved every bit of it, full of emotion and imagery- and hopefully you do extremely well in the contest!
    love and peace
    halleluja

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