Spying your throbbing vein with murderous glee,
My intentions have been known for a long time,
And I would not be here if you did not agree,
That your life's blood belongs to me.
The draining of your life will become,
A welcome release from your heart's ache,
To my dark wishes you will succumb,
and drift to slumber never to wake.
A contest entry
- [[Perhaps a little dark. But who can blame a girl for trying?]] by Naridill.
525 points, ended May 31, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I give you one bunny! lol.
Was very interesting, not so much dark as was morbidly fantasy like. Which is good, interesting but definately am getting a little sick of that background, hehe. What is it supposed to be anyway? A street light?
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That's a good question. hrmm. It looks too bright to be the moon. Maybe it is the sun being shallowed by the darkness? hehe. Thanks for the silver bunny!
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Your dark side is creepy, Count Griffin!!
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I like it... it speaks to the darker side of love and lust. It makes me think that maybe I need to work on my form because of its simple expressiveness.
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Dark But I like It
This is dark and I like it very much. I loved the words you used. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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