Poetic shades of cotton snow,
Bathed in the beauty of dreams
Indepth compassion they bestow,
Through pitch pools, where circles gleam
And I can feel a slight sorrow,
With a hint of tinted creams
As they long to see tomorrow,
Furry flippers, swim supreme.
With sensory whiskers, and nose of bliss,
I want to give them an Eskimo kiss
A wobble, a dip, a beauty as this,
Beneath crashing waves, they may reminisce.
My weavings trace this portrait pure,
Gazing through their hollow eyes
I ponder what they must endure,
And wish them all wonderful lives
We all have fates, without the cures,
I weep when I hear those cries
But love and laughter they'll secure,
A path for us all on high.
Embrace connections, through spiritual skies,
And way down under, love also abides
As nature redeems us, still there's those tides,
But deep in their souls, there's love in their eyes.
In a list
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'And way down under, love also abides'
Wow, this darn near reduced me to tears.
Penned from the depths of a loving soul. Moving melodic rhyme and a very inspiring poem indeed. Well done, Timothy.
Bella
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as i read this..it seems like a screenplay..and the camera angle is slowly zooming in on the seals..this is the first animal poem i have read on AP for a year..thnx u...forgot about all those wonderful pieces out there..very different from the usual depressing ones..lol..anyway..very cute..nice discription..and i love the additional person..i felt like i'm the person in the poem looking at the seals..and maybe instead of love in their eyes..they might be afraid of me..lol..
and i love how this piece is based on nature.pure ..sincere..serene..the untainted world of the sea...theortically speaking..and those cute little animals swimming in the water..
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Totally awesome, hon! So beautiful and so descriptive! Love this and your awesome heart!
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Fuzzalicious!
TiM!!!!!---If you were an animal--THIS WOULD BE YOU!!!
Love the images, love the subliminals, love how you liberate the lil' harp seal without making the reader dust off their PETA cards!!! This one gets 3 flippers up!!!!
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Nicely done.
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This is very beautiful and wonderfully written.
I love the rhyme scheme and imagery in this one.
Well done and thanks a lot for sharing this here.
Best of luck to you with it in the contest!
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Beautiful!
danggggggg! this was an amazing write, i love pretty much every line of this poem! 29 lines of pure gold, great write dad and great job of describing this little beauty!! You really are creative with your words and have such a talent in writing these poems, I love you lots!
keep it up
timmy
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~Excellent Image and Beautifully Penned~
~My beloved friend Poeticweaver, Je t'aime~
The dream of the dolphin
Is here in my heart once again
My new old friend
How we love all the creatures in the sea
I do love them in the heart of us as we
A Beautiful Tender song filled with tears
For those gentle snow white teddy bears
It seems the world is blind and cannot hear
I’ve waited too long to sing this song
We both hear their call
As my heart cries and falls
It’s natural to be in love
With their precious round eyes
As I hear all of Mother Nature’s cries
Hold me tight and close in your dreams
And remember were on the same team
I may have been a tadpole way back then
But I still remember when
Love was king
And your heart is the happiness true love brings
All the best to you in this contest
I wish you and yours the best.
~All my love Sharon~
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Strange how baby seals affect me... always slightly sad because I've no doubt drawn some subliminal association with some fellow bearing a club that so often shares a photo frame with them. But I suppose they are rather cute in a cameo shot.
I suspect from the tone and undertones that you share my unconscious concern. And between the photo and the write the poem hit's home without clubbing the reader over the head.... Nicely done.
Rainbows,
~RJ~
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Beatifully expressed
The picture is amazing and your write outstanding. I love anything that has to do with nature. Such detail with your flowing words. (Lisa)
"With sensory whiskers, and nose of bliss,
I want to give them an Eskimo kiss
A wobble, a dip, a beauty as this,
Beneath crashing waves, they may reminisce"
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how awesome this is. a baby seal is so cute and would make me giggle. thank you for sharing this with me. hope you are well. viyanna rosemarie
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Loved It
I love white seals... I truly enjoyed this piece of work.. How are you doing?
Yvonne
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Awesome with such beautiful detail and description. I am trying to catch a few reviews and now I found this sweet poem. I love the way you describe them and they are so adorable. Keep penning, bro. Luv ya, Tracy
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This is a lovely piece and you seemed to pull it off even with the variance of the iambic pentameter, you still maintained the iamb. It seems this is because you inversed the stress per foot when you switched from male to female at the caesura. Especially in the first stanza were you started with male and switched to female every other line in the secondary or subordinate stress with feminine endings before the caesura. For that reason I don’t think the commas are necessary at the line endings. The image is stunningly lovely and made me smile. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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dannnnn it lmao
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WOOOHOOOOOOOOOOO hunney i loved it. This was awesomem beautifully penned. Love the rythmn and flow of thispiece and the rhyme scheme was perfect best of luck to you in this contest.
Love you.
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excellent~
Very well written
Very avid description..
Best of luck in the contest....
I entered too do hope you come see me
Hugs
Susan~~~
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