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Loving Souls

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Loving Souls

Loving and safe in your mountain air
O how it feels, lifted high above
Vanity disappears with a love so rare
In the apex of loving strength thereof
Naturally cleaving to your arms with care
Giving myself to your towering love

Safe within your protecting love
O the feeling of love in the open air
Understanding how much you really care
Loving the way I am cradled above
Safe in your arms and protected thereof
Now finding a man such as you is so rare

Two souls locked together, uncommonly rare
High above the weather, locked in our love
Lost in your peaks and your strength thereof
Fill my soul with you as my lungs with air
You’ve lifted me high and so far above
In your strong arms, I am locked in your care

No one can harm me, I don’t have a care
For a mountain of strength is O so rare
Of all the land that you tower above
I rest in your arms, your mountain of love
Your strength and protection, your manly air
Has given me purpose to serve you thereof

If the meaning of love is clear thereof
Content I rest on your pinnacle of care
The breath of your love in the mountain air
As a man like you is extremely rare
So I’ll keep and serve you in all my love
As you are my master and high above

So I sit on your apex high above
Tending your needs as your woman thereof
I give you my soul and undying love
And I come to be taken into your care
Love like ours is hard to find so uncommonly rare
Please hold me close, I will stay in your mountain air

I’ll live in your mountain air and stay with you above
The bond we found is rare yet we have thereof
Give to me your care and I pledge to you my love

 

 

Author notes

For Allan

This poem is constructed in three forms. acrostic, sestina, and rictameter

Acrostic Poetry is where the first letter of each line spells a word, usually using the same words as in the title.

Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain. Starting your first line with a two syllable word, you then consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two. i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 Then down again, 8, 6, 4, 2 Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.


The sestina is a strict ordered form of poetry, dating back to twelfth
century French troubadours. It Consists of six six-line (sestets)
stanzas followed by a three-line envoy. Rather than use a rhyme
scheme, the six ending words of the first stanza are repeated as the
ending words of the other five stanzas in a set pattern. The envoy
uses two of the ending words per line, again in a set pattern.

First stanza, ..1 ..2 ..3 ..4 ..5 ..6
Second stanza, ..6 ..1 ..5 .. 2 ..4 ..3
Third stanza, ..3 ..6 ..4 ..1 ..2 ..5
Fourth stanza, ..5 ..3 ..2 ..6 ..1 ..4
Fifth stanza, ..4 ..5 ..1 ..3 ..6 ..2
Sixth stanza, ..2 ..4 ..6 ..5 ..3 ..1

Concluding tercet:
middle of first line ..2, end of first line ..5
middle of second line ..4, end of second line..3
middle if third line ..6, end of third line ..1

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  • sunny day
    August 16, 2007

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    Amera, A golden write indeed that you have penned in this triple formed piece. The cup speaks for itself as your magic wove the love felt within the work. Left breathless again by your words as I will always say to someone else, I'm still not speechless. LOL You have a rare gift and I believe it is a part of your soul so loving and caring that make you who you are. A Poet Laureate and a wonderful person. This is spellbinding and so filled with beautiful imagery. You put forth so much emotion in this one. Two poetic souls have joined and become one in that mountain air. I am so happy I went back to find this one. Thank you for sharing always of your gift. Kudos on this brilliant piece and the golden cup of love it that accompanied it. Love you my friend, Joyce


  • Swan song gold member
    July 1, 2007
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    I don't think I need to say much the shiny thing speaks for itself.


  • RedAquarius
    June 14, 2007

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    "I'll live in your mountain air" - sigh, that is so lovely. And I'm in awe, not only do you excel in singular forms but here you combine THREE, I could never reach such summits. This is so full of love and promise and aching, it makes my heart full to know of such depth of emotion.


  • crivanea silver member
    June 14, 2007

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    very wise choice..lol..like i said last time..i love sestina..and i think this one is even better than ur previous..so romantic..although i'm not much a romantic poet..i am in love w/ them..my fav. poem is "the definition of love"..lol..anyway..ur piece is amazing..and although u didn't put ur name on it..i already knew it was u..

    i have a few lines i really like:

    Content I rest on your pinnacle of care
    Love like ours is hard to find so uncommonly rare

    and although as i read this poem..i can't help but wince a bit at the slight sexist remarks.."
    So I’ll keep and serve you in all my love
    As you are my master and high above" ..i really enjoy this..wonderful piece..thnx u for entering


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    I am in awe of your amazing, poetic talents That is a MAJOR understatement! Most excellent this is and whomever this is written for should feel extremely honored
    Thank you for sharing! May life smile upon you


    • Amera gold member
      June 5, 2007
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      That is such a sweet comment; thank you. You know the one I wrote it for. It's PerVirtuous Allan. Just about everyone here knows him. He's the goofy one wearing Lanes' mask who wrote the comment below.


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 5, 2007

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    Really a very creative poem using all these three forms together in one. Very well done; liked the overlap of the two poems in one - must have taken a bit of time for this to turn out like this. A bit of skill involved, for sure.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 1, 2007

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    Now you are the Queen of poetry with this piece~ the rest of us just kneel down to this perfection wonderfully written in every-way thank you so much for sharing and if this doesn't win a trophy then they don't know good poetry


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 30, 2007

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    Wow! Three forms woven beautifully together! I am in awe.
    You have the picture on true manhood here as well, in it's purest form. Amazing!


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is an excellent sestina/acrostic combined poem that has real depth within its content. The imageries are vivid, as is the emotional content. Well done with this sis and thank you for sharing. La x


  • Desire gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    Aaaaaaw Danggggg!!!

    Can I borrow Your brain, fingers and just the entire package You walk the Earth with

    Powerful piece to honor Your other half
    Woooooooooo hoooooooooooooooo
    Love it! ...Oy!!
    and I can only envision smiles after he inhaled it too
    Beautifully presented and I must pick Your brain!
    Oh Yes

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 29, 2007

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    Oh..this the beauty of dawns first light, the song of owl calling in the night, who sings to the stars in the sky above, telling all the world of Amera's love.

    You are a wonder, my dear. Such beautiful poetry, but to interweave these forms tells of genius. You amaze me.
    LOve,Luna
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  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    Very Nice,

    Such sweet content that captivates the heart and soul, wonderful flow and form. Thanks for sharing, all the best in the contest! -Timothy


  • PerVirtuous
    May 29, 2007

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    You humble me. I do have mountain air right here by the sea. I will share it with you for as long as you want. You have outdone yourself. I would give a thousand bunnies, but only have three to give. Life is so unfair... Love you.


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    Allan is one lucky ducky...
    You write beautiful poetry for him
    and in the process, share it with us.
    I think we all have it pretty damn good,
    thanks to you Love, Lane

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