You took my heart and made me cry but when i see you i want to die!!
You said I was your one and only
So I loved you with all my heart
But then you cheated and broken my already prebroken heart
So for that I hate you!
So you say that you need me and that you love me and that you don't want to break up
So all I need to know in my heart is:
I love you
I hate you
I dont know what it is about you that intrigues me.
So I need to walk away and I need you to just stay away..
A contest entry
- Headline! by inkstaind.
600 points, ended June 3, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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"I think I love you... I think I hate you" I can relate to that title sooo much! It totally describes me. I love poems that I can relate to. Great job. ♥ Erin
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hmmm... this was a interesting poem and I can really relate. this poem reminds me alot of my earlier poems, and I just want to warn you to keep a steady flow, try to keep a pattern of long lines and short lines so that it looks more put together, and make sure to find a unique voice. all in all I think you will be a really great poet with time and I look forward to reading some more of your work
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AHHH! It doesnt rhyme!!! You were rhyming and now your not...Its good! I like it but it doesnt rhyme!
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