Mass confusion plagues my mind,
as I search for answers and clarity.
Torn apart from the inside
by this chaos clouded nightmare,
created by my own reality.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Great job Kiddo!! You have done a terrific job with this. Who knew you could be such a great writer of the darkside.
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wow!
great write, i can so relate to this!... created by my own reality -
Deep and dark just the way I like them, you have penned a wonderful write in these short lines that flow with ease and have a grandstand imagery...
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Wow!!
Powerful piece You have penned and done so in five lines!!
I did mine and was like...
-passed out-
My brain went on a siesta
Keep that ink flowing!!
Best wishes to You in the Challenge!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Cool. Cool. I like that conclusion. Nice twist. Good luck!
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Wolfe ~
Sir Wolfe ~
I like nothing more than to see the true
depths of ones inkwell ~
The place you took me in this write...
...I have escaped many times with bruises ~
The brain is a tormented, twisted place
where only the Brave dare to have a picnic ~
Extremely well penned ~
I can see your reality...
....it has *best read thus far*
written all over it ~
Best to you in grabbing that *Pass*
With writes such as this in just
5 short lines....you won't need one ~
Bear ~
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Thank you very much, your comment is much appreciated
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wow this is interesting. I liked it.. shoret but to the point.. kinda.. another amazing write
~Kitten~
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A short, but extremely profound write Ktulu - it really did speak to me on a completely different level. It was dark and sad, yet so real.
Well done - I truly enjoyed this one!
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This is a deep DEEP piece. I feel that your ending was the most powerful.. and intriguing part of it all. hmm.. now I know I have just spelled that all wrong, but you still love me.. DONTCHA>>>>>> -peers at-
lol. You have stepped up to the plate my dearest! I feel you will hold a tight and secure palce this first round! WELL DONE!
Mel
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This write is so extremely deep and personal. You can almost feel the struggle that you are going through. I do think that there could have been more about the struggle. This thing that is tearing you apart... what does it feel like? Make the reader feel a glimmer of the pain that you are feeling.
Very nicely done... I really liked the flow but wish i felt more after reading it.
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