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How does it feel to know that your WRONG

I wondered why I was
Murdering myself with sadness
Drowning myself
In expensive makeup
And late night
Heart crashes
And realized I was doing it to feel complete
To feel a little real
Without you
I don't [can't] watch
Myself ruin myself
Without getting some help
I need some help
sweetheart, this is URGENT
So urgent I may need
To stop to breathe
But how can one breathe
At a time like this
Watching myself on the ledge
Pushing the envelope so far
Myself will wind up dead
live and let die
Die and let live
Kiss me
Just this once
so sweetly and filled with desire
How does it feel to hear that you are
WRONG
watch me fall
Down the staircase
Make me see
What a head case I am
I guess I am just a outcast in love
Take a picture
So you can keep it forever
But I forgot
my best side was your worst invention
come here, come here
&& you'll thank me later
now you see me, now you don't
And tell me hunny
How do you cope?
We all know
Myself is
messssed up
Hardcore
I know…
you'll never live without me

Author notes

wordbank:
you'll never live without me
sweetheart, this is URGENT
wrong
live and let die
watch me fall
so sweetly
desire
outcast
in love
I was doing it to feel complete
my best side was your worst invention
I don't [can't] watch
&& you'll thank me later
come here, come here
now you see me, now you don't
without you
messssed up

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 21, 2007

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    Yeah...
    I've often felt like this .
    It's sad babe, it's really sad.
    I can feel your emptiness here...Situations suck.

  • this is a war
    June 19, 2007
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    thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • MelissahhMidnite
    June 16, 2007

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    omfg wow,
    i love this poem!
    the title drew me in at first
    then i read it.
    gosh
    its just so soul bareing
    i love it
    fantastic
    it deserves first place


  • ThnxsForTheMmrs-x-
    June 12, 2007

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    This as seen below is what I liked about this poem!!!




    [How does it feel to know that your WRONG]
    "I wondered why I was
    Murdering myself with sadness
    Drowning myself
    In expensive makeup
    And late night
    Heart crashes
    And realized I was doing it to feel complete
    To feel a little real
    Without you
    I don't [can't] watch
    Myself ruin myself
    Without getting some help
    I need some help
    sweetheart, this is URGENT
    So urgent I may need
    To stop to breathe
    But how can one breathe
    At a time like this
    Watching myself on the ledge
    Pushing the envelope so far
    Myself will wind up dead
    live and let die
    Die and let live
    Kiss me
    Just this once
    so sweetly and filled with desire
    How does it feel to hear that you are
    WRONG
    watch me fall
    Down the staircase
    Make me see
    What a head case I am
    I guess I am just a outcast in love
    Take a picture
    So you can keep it forever
    But I forgot
    my best side was your worst invention
    come here, come here
    && you'll thank me later
    now you see me, now you don't
    And tell me hunny
    How do you cope?
    We all know
    Myself is
    messssed up
    Hardcore
    I know…
    you'll never live without me"

    Wow babe every word within this was written in pur gold, utmost beautly. It was breathtaking just how good this was. It touched me!! Very deep and emotinal. Strong and energy convaying!!!!

    Thank you so much for entring it was without a doublt perfect..

    Much love and good luck
    Kaydee

    Kepp the energy flowing and the pen moving!!!!!



  • LucyLightning
    May 30, 2007

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    omfg. loveeeeeeeeeeeee. I'm glad someone used my best side was your worst invention. I was waiting for someone to use it! lol. Good luck in the contest!

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