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In the crook of the stream

I saw her
I watched
As she swam
In the morning
As she bathed
In the pool
A little way off
In the crook  of the stream
At ease.

Her nakedness
Not wholly revealed
As she swam
Disturbing the water
Close to the surface
Diving deep
Moving through shadow
And fractured light.

I saw her
I watched
As she rose
from the water
leaving the shadows
Stepping out of the stream
The sun spread
Over her body
Water droping from her skin. 

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Perdix

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  • schwester
    August 8, 2007

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    Enjoyed this, and you might like Brahms's wonderful song (Op 85, no 1) Sommerabend (Summer evening)- a setting of a poem by Heinrich Heine. You need to hear it to appreciate the full poetic effect!

    Here are the words, without umlauts:

    Dammernd liegt der Sommerabend
    Uber wald und grunen Wiesen;
    Goldner Mond im blauen Himmel
    Strahlt herunter, duftig labend.

    An dem Bache zirpt die Grille,
    Und es regt sich in dem Wasser,
    Und der Wandrer hort ein Platschern
    Und ein Atman in der Stille.

    Dorten, an dem Bach alleine,
    Badet sich die schone Elfe;
    Arm und Nacken, weiss und lieblich,
    Schimmern in dem Mondenscheine.

    This is a translation:

    At dusk the summer evening lies over forest and green meadows; the golden moon shines down from the blue sky, tenderly soothing.
    By the brook a cricket chirps and the waters stir, and the wayfarer hears a splashing and a breathing in the stillness.
    There, alone by the brook, a fair water nymph is bathing; arms and neck, white and lovely, gleam in the moonlight.


  • lillianisevol
    June 24, 2007

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    Discriptive

    I could really see the images of the woman swimming and found myself hanging on your words ... my only regret was that it ended ... I was waiting for the next scene to unfold. Great write ... I liked it!
    Lilly


  • Simply Olivia
    June 23, 2007
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    well written

    Beauitiful


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    June 11, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    This is gorgeous. I love the images that played through my mind, subtle and sensual

    Faerie - Site Greeter


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    May 29, 2007

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    very good imagery in this poem you have written. i think you should do well in the contest you have entered. thank you for sharing your talent with me today. viyanna rosemarie

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