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Sodium Bath

And in your darkest hour
By the anger suppressed with in
I will become most over powered
Where all devilish sins must begin

I will step into your bed chamber
As you rest your little head
And with in me, all my anger
Until my hunger has been fed

My hand will rest upon your cheek
And there, I shall sit and watch you
Watching you drifting in your sleep
I will begin everything I thought to

The chilled blade, the heated flame
My quivering breath of excitement
It is time to play, my twisted game
And your mistakes are my enticement

The thread in hand, the needle dull
I will sew your precious sight
As the vile stitches pull
Your soft eyelids closed tight

The sheets and blankets stir
I know you are awake
The muffled screams and silent cries I heard
When my plans were set in place

This rusted razor blade
Will graze across your flesh
You will feel the pain
As the rust and blood will mesh

Cut by cut, into your skin
Only one inch inbetween
Covering your body, I begin
These cuts you can not see

Sodium in one hand, acid in the other
This simplicit torture shall take place
Because you broke my little brother
And now your putrid heart will race

With my brand new orange covered plyers
I will rip off each finger and toe nail you have
This is what happens to liars
Who are ready for my sodium bath

One by one, until the deed is done
I place grains of salt in every other cut
And back I go, to start again
As I listen to you fuss

In the wounds I missed
I have returned for more
With my painful acid kiss
A drop in each cut that wasnt hit before

I have decided it is time for your bath
So, I ran you salt water in the tub
This brutal pleasure is all I have
While the salt seeps into your every cut

Wrinkled and dehydrated you are
Your skin crumpled around your bones
To the unsweetened prune you are
It is time for me to go home

Author notes

Breaking bones, eating your own vomit, nails through your hands... these things I have all thought of before. I wanted some other form of torture and salt and acid were it! Can you imagine how painful it would be to be cut all over your body with the cuts an inch apart and to have salt placed into these fresh cuts, every other one and then in the ones skipped drops of acid? And I dont mean the acid that eats away metal... that would kill them too quickly, they would immediately go into shock and shut down. I wanted something painful that wouldnt kill them.. at least not yet. The acid in oranges and grapefruits! To finish off the task, soak their wounded body in a salt bath! Let them lay in it until they are completely dehydrated and shrivle up and die!

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  • novacaine.
    May 30, 2007
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    This is fuckin awesome. Brutal.. && I love it.


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    May 29, 2007

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    FUCKIN SICK!!

    THIS SHIT IS BRUTAL! I ABSOLUTELY FUCKIN ADORE IT! You've got a sadistic mind, I LOVE IT!!!!!! You should read a lot of my stuff, i think you'd really like them if you can contemplate and map out stuff like this, go read the story: "Love-Like Murder." That's pretty brutal, anyway, NICE PIECE! NICELY WRITTEN, Shit, this is just really good. Kudos