My pet stands before me
She has disobeyed me
It is time for her punishment
A test of loyalty
She stands before me, nude,
I hand her a sharp razor
Moving it to her neck
And I speak to her
Follow the rules
You can not die
But my order is this
I want to see death
She looks at me
Her eyes are wide
Tear stained, she cries
Showing me that she loves me
Yes, though she is mine
I control her every action
She still loves me dearly
And would die for me
If I would let her
But now she must think
How to kill herself
Without dying?
Without dis-obeying?
Then it hits her
Like a poisoned arrow to the heart
I want to see death
I didn't say whose
She falls to her knees
She says she can't
She can't kill me
She loves me
I close my eyes
And tell her to do it
She looks up
Her eyes begging me
But I stand silent
She stands before me
Putting the razor to my neck
With a loud cry
She slices
The blood sprays on her naked body
She does not care
She drops the razor
As I fall to the ground
The blood pools around me
She falls to her knees and hugs me
Says she is sorry
I smile
No my Kitten
You did well
Being your Master tortured me
I deserved this
My final breath contained words
A final order, and I tell her
Do not follow me
Do not die for me
Those worlds were my last
She is to live on
My torture passed onto her
And the story continues
Author notes
For a contest, anyone who knows me know this is not my typical writing.
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For other contest - Sorry, but I'm not going to be used by you any more
A contest entry
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This is amazing, not at all what i expected, I friggin love it! Great job, and my luck to you
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Wow. Very deep and twisted... Just Wow.
Have a wonderful day and good luck in the contest,
FallenPoeticAngel
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She stands before me
Putting the razor to my neck
With a loud cry
She slices
The blood sprays on her naked body
She does not care
She drops the razor
As I fall to the ground
The blood pools around me
She falls to her knees and hugs me
Says she is sorry
I smile
loved those line
good poem i loved it great job, good luck in my contest -
hey, now this is my kind of poetry...lol. u did really good. stunning imagery and flow! I liked it! keep up the good work!
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that was pretty good hon. different. weird. but that is what i am looking 4. i honestly have never read anything like that tho. GOOD LUCK!!!
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This is really good i could feel the emotion and uit painted a picture in my mind well done
nightmare xx
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Nice Master/slave piece. Could do to have the continue story with it. I look forward to reading that.
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my my my, this was good, you know as i mean it didn't go the way i thought it would but man, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Excellent
Very well done. Truly twisted and dark. Good luck in the contest.
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this is trully twisted. talk about no-win.
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Tis is an work of one that can see things from both sides of the tales. An dark tail of how far love and loyality can go.
Empusa
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so dark so evil so amazing.. I absolutely drooled over this
~Kitten~
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THIS IS SOOOOO AWESOME! SHIT, I FUCKIN LOVE THIS! i mean, WOW! IT RENDERED ME SPEECHLESS, it made me WANT to continue reading, this is very well written and very creative, i held my breath till the end. KUDOS ON THE PIECE! Kudos.....
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Thank you for the words that shows true love no matter how it is looks to others. For the master loves his pet in a way to wish his death and the pet loves her master in a way that she not only follows his orders in life but follows his final order to live.
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This is a very dark piece. It's good though. Good work.
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