It's there, my grandfather's clock,
standing tall and gaunt
against the wall of the loge.
I am told there are no eyes on the face,
but I see them.
They are ensconced midst
sleek hands and ticking seconds.
Is it my mad imagination
or are those eyes watching
while time stalks my every movement?
And when the chimes strike eight,
what happens?
Does a phantom butler announce
some formal dreary dinner, a black tie affair
where women appear in haute couture
designed by some misogynist who sneers
when she appears in public
with bosoms barely covered,
cosmetized in harlot face and Medusa hair?
The chimes could, of course, summon
children, pajama-clad and ready for night dreams
while parents delight in thoughts
of some adult conversation
with kisses and caresses.
Only the clock knows
those whose life is governed
by chime of time ordering them
what to do and when to do it.
So, Dare I defy those machinations
and play at work, or work at play?
Dare I be different or will
these meanderings of the mind
be my single coward's challenge to
the relentless ticking clicking of the clock
while I continue
believing I have a choice?
Author notes
Obsession with an object
A contest entry
- OPTIONS CONTEST FOR THE A.P STAFF (INVITE ONLY) by Electric Sunrise.
1000 points, ended May 30, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Very Own Rounds Contest - Part One by Exodus.
600 points, ended September 4, 2007, 31 entries
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450 points, ended October 2, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
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425 points, ended January 27, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Your imgagery descriptions were
vivid and deliciously written to enjoy! WE were pulled
into one line after another, anxcious to read ..where
in the world is the poet taking us?
And Bullseye...you hit us with a brave sword and pearl
of wisdom! That's was a heavenly dark poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) -
Congrats to you on the trophies..they are well deserved. This is top notch writing.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
smart and wonderfully rich
poem with delicious imagery and prompts that awaken us
and make us flow with this poem!
Talented Talent Poet you are!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
will add you my I must learn from list!
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I loved the write, I think you used some great devices to make the message clear. Loved the alliteration (especially with the words begining with D, they gave the message of the misery, fear and perplexion). Loved the topic too, a little different but in a good way.
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Oh wow. I don't think I've ever read anything like this one. I was a little surprised at the start by the length, and I admit I was dubious that I would have an easy time getting through it, but once I started reading I couldn't stop. You use language so well it is a lovely thing to read. Thank you and good luck
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And congrats on your gold, well deserved.
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This is very interesting, I love how this is colloquial, but it works and it still sounds poetic. On the first read, all the reader thinks is 'oh wow what cool imagery' but then again, there is more to this. I honestly had to read this 5 times in order to get the gist of the metaphor and symbolism, but I love it- that is the kind of poems I like. Ones that are mysterious and captivating, ones which are the kind I go back and reread and find something new that I missed.
There is a whole lot more depth to this than what meets the eye.
This sends a strong message to society, perhaps this man is 'mad' [putting how he thinks the grandfather clock is alive, and watching him. lol] but I think all of us at times think the way he does. (about the prostitutes, etc..)
The flow here was flawless, and it helped the development of ideas move smoothly, the transition was very well executed.
I thought the repetition of 'chimes' (chimes of time) was very effective, and a good strategy to get the point across to the reader, to emphasize that particular metaphor. That helped me out when it came to figuring out what this all meant.
I think this is the best poem I have read of yours. I always thought you were good, but this right here proves to me that you've definitely got skills and can certainly impress me.
Very deep, insightful, and fascinating. I loved this.
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Thank you for your comment. Very kind. I was truly surprised when I turned up a winner. I really never expected it. Nice to get the gold, though!
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A Gold winner! Truly it is. A thought provoking piece. You give the readers visuals beyond your beautiful words. You've used time in a way I've never seen before. This is a piece to be very proud of. hugs, Kelly
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Excellent write, loved reading it, nice rythm nice flow, and some lovely and inruiging imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest and thanks for your entry
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