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Promised Fragrance Blossoms

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Morning garden sparkles promise.
Jays sing praise to lilac fragrance
bursting forth from tender blossoms.

Regal pageant; velvet blossoms,
iris gems unfold spring's promise --
pave the way for summer's fragrance.

Russian sages rich with fragrance,
slender stems show modest blossoms.
Fertile soil delivers promise. 

Promised fragrance blossoms.


Joyce Josephson




Author notes

option 2

Form: Tritina

Modeled from the Sestina; there is no rhyme scheme, instead is comprised of three stanzas using the same three words in a Sestina like pattern, and a final line which uses the three words in the starting sequence:

A.. B.. C...
C.. A.. B...
B.. C.. A...
A,B,C...

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Aww this was so beautiful and serene feelings while reading. Loved your imagery and the form you chose to use. Lovely write!!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    April 23, 2008
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    Congratulations Sis!! Woohoo! Well deserved.


  • FifthDove
    April 23, 2008

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    Nice, beautiful poem, I like the form you've use all the lines work very well together. Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    WOW!!! Look at that well deserved bling! This is wonderful. The imagery teased ever sense. Wonderfully written, and a beautiful border to match. Good luck in the contest.


  • Melissa Burns
    March 6, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my humble little contest. I am having fun exsposing myself to something different. Good luck


  • katie-jo
    September 5, 2007

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    delightful!
    I love this poem very much, it is very lovely. This form is one I've seen but not terribly often. Best of luck the contest and thank you ever so for entering this excellent piece.

  • Mercury Rising
    August 22, 2007

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    A really delightful poem penned in a fascinating form of which I am unfamiliar. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this marevelous piece.

    David

  • Virgoan
    July 16, 2007

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    The form and the theme used is superb!

    Thanks so much for sharing this exceptional piece. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • Celticmoon
    July 12, 2007

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    A wonderfully soft and gentle piece that flows effortlessly throughout. The imagery is absolutely fabulous from begining to end. I do not believe that there lies one portion of this penning that is superior to the rest. All just fits so perfectly together to create a work of art that is quite impressive. Thank you for entering and good luck!



    Blessings


  • Florida Sunshine
    July 4, 2007

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    Wow~ You went from Good to great! nice improvement~ Nice job! Thanks for entering the contest ~ best of luck to you!


  • Dark Whispers
    June 24, 2007

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    I have yet to write a tritina, but this was wonderfully written, way beyond some thing I could write. great job


  • B Chandler
    June 21, 2007
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    CRICKET


  • Celticmoon
    June 20, 2007
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    maybe, keeping for further consideration


  • Ephiphany
    June 18, 2007

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    Wow

    this is beautiful...I though it would have been about the picture I posted, but it was still a wonderful entry and I thank you.,


  • mars
    June 12, 2007
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    Congratulations on your poem. Well penned indeed.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    June 11, 2007
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    Congratulations on winning Gold. Well deserved.


  • Samplette gold member
    June 11, 2007

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    This is a stunningly beautiful Tritina. Perfect form and has such an easy flow. Excellent job. Thank you for entering the contest.
    sam


  • Candy6
    June 2, 2007

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    this poem is well written. very interesting. I like 3 lines. so this is called sestina...I never heard of this poem. Before. I never heard of tritina. That is cool poems comes in different forms.


  • Amera gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    This is truly lovely and you have used the form to its' fullest potential. Not even noticing that it is written in a structured form the flow and image blend to compose a perfect masterpiece. I love this.

    Love,
    Amera &heasrt;


  • acqua
    May 30, 2007

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    This is so beautiful and you seemed to have used the form so well and the poem so lovely and full of the beauty of the flowers. Good Luck in the contest and all the best!


  • Mirthryl
    May 30, 2007

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    Loved the border and text/background colors.

    Would have had no clue on the form without the author notes, so thank you!
    Interesting way to combine/repeat the main ideas.
    Your garden sounds lovely!

  • Revwilliamfoos
    May 30, 2007

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    very good

    if God wanted to make me happy he would let lilacs bloom three hundred and sixty six days a year even in the snow boy I love that sent keep doing well and good luck
    love the papa

    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      May 30, 2007

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      I love the scent of lilacs also. I wish more of my bushes would bloom!
      I remember picking them as a kid.

      Thanks for your comment!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 30, 2007

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    Wow you put this form together so nively. The flow is excellent. Great work and border as well
    All the best to you.
    Gaylene


  • individuality gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    a good piece and i have been looking at those end words as separate entities to the poem too and yours read nicely working on their own as well as in the poem a good poem

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