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Lunatic, Schizophrenic, Maniacal Sanity

                                                                                                        

             A paradox, a paradigm, shifting sand, prismatic.             
            This is a house of many faces, voice, many toned.           

         Like Einstein meets I Love Lucy, brevity finely honed.        

            Faceted, a wordy mime, refractive, charismatic.              
           If sanity were alcohol, here we'd serve Everclear.             
     Ricocheting words, genres, styles, forms; mustn't assume.   
           190 proof uber-sanity can sound strangely queer.             
 Outside of the box...wait! There's no box present, in this room!
                                                                                                        
               Passing out epiphanies like candy from a trolly.             
 Spook shows, and slap stick, and x-rated rhyme like Dr. Suess.
   Sweet moralistic children's stories, just like Mother Goose.      
     Naughty stuff, where any pervert, can get a quick jolly.         
 Though the line's sharply drawn at contemplation of the noose,
       Something here for everyone, a quite frolicsome folly!         
                                                                                                        
         For starters, that's the combination appetizer plate           
       I am many women, and each one carries her own quill         
        Belly up poetic gluttons, check the menu, get your fill          
       The tapestry of words I weave may even tell your fate       
    Peer behind the curtain, see the wizard? Who might that be?.
      Travel to Xanadu, Oz, through wormholes, or Neverland.         
Venture through the Quantum Froth, you never know what you'll see!
           A Circus, Mardi Gras, or a big forty piece brass band!           
                                                                                                          
     Freeverse, blankverse, pantoum, villanelle, haiku and tanka   
       Specialty of the house, X-ray vision that leads to truth.          
 Shaken or stirred? A wedge of lemon? Sweet or dry Vermouth? 
     It may touch ya, scare ya, shake ya up, or even honk ya!       
    Whether it be etherial, or lyrical, or sometimes just uncouth!   
      The Candyman CAN! Oh wait a sec...that's Willy Wonka!         

                                                                                                         

                                                                                                         

 

Author notes

  A double Italian Sonnet, with a variation in the rhyme scheme originally used by Alfred Tennyson's older brother:
Charles Tennyson-Turner,
and that is:
abbacdcd effefe.
In the secondary sonnet, beginning again with new end rhyme presented; but the rhyme sceme repeated.
An additional variation is used in the meter of this piece, penned in pentameter plus two additional poetic feet,
or a fourteen syllable count per line.

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  • Lj-
    June 21, 2007

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    lol, this was so cool.
    Loved:
    "If sanity were alcohol, here we'd serve Everclear."


    Congrats on Gold.


  • kkatie55
    June 9, 2007

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    great

    this is a wonderful read...so different from most ...it keeps you thinking through out...and made me thirsty ...lol...funny the willy wonka line...keep up the good writing ....peace Katie


  • exoticbeaches
    June 1, 2007

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    absotively posilutely wonderfunable. Great write.
    Though i had a bit of difficulty reading it because of your rotating rainbow wheels i struggled to read it because it caught my attention.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 29, 2007
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    Cinnamon,

    This is 210 proof great,as you are, always. It was really amazing the derth of joy I had on AP while you were off. read this and smile big, for both the write and you, really big gal. I am so glad you're back and you know that without me even telling yu such.



    Len

  • karabi
    May 29, 2007

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    MINDBOGGLING

    You are back with a bang, it seems. Before I go insane I'll have to read it several times to crack this hard nut.


  • Amera gold member
    May 29, 2007

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    Wow!

    Did I miss reading this kind of stuff while you were away. This is wonderful, magical and thought provoking. No one can write like you Sis, the DK poetic style is fantastic. But; you already know that don't you? Love it.

    Love,
    Amera ♥


    • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
      May 29, 2007

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      Thanks!!!!!(Think Sideshow Barker's Voice) Step right folks, come one, come all and see the increEEdible morphing mouth! She waaaalks, she taaalks, she craaawls on her belly Like a REPTILE! LOL! Thank ya Darlin! You are sooo good for my self esteem, like an innoculation against bummin'! I've been missin' you this weekend! I hopped off the puter right after our last contact and I guess just before you IM'd me asking me to go to yahoo, drafted hubby to help with housework! joy! Anyway went to yahoo, several hours later and popped in like a stalker several times since, yoohooin you on yahoo! So has the window closed, or do you still need a favor? I am at your service if so!
      love
      dk


  • Abbey Normal
    May 29, 2007

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    What an incredible, mind blowing magnifigance this is. There are just so many excellent references.... so many insanily spectacular lines and images. I'm truly blown away.

    There's a childlike quality here mixed with a savage porongrahic feel. This is what makes this write unique.

    It's feels like a sweet freak show, a psychotic celebration, a beautiful piece of twisted dream-like lunacy.

    This write is by far one of my favorites on this site.

    So much time- So little insanity.... Wait.... Strike that. Reverse it!


  • rock n rulz
    May 29, 2007

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    Nice Poem

    You Really Hve Dug Deep Into Someones Mind and Pulled His True Feelings Out Of The Box..Oh Wait There Is No Box!!

    Hhehe
    U dESERVE mY aPPLAUDS!!


  • purple wings
    May 29, 2007

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    brilliaNT WRITE!I SUFFER FROM MENTAL ILLNESS AND WHAT YOU WROTE IS A FAR CRY FROM POSSESION.QUICK DRILL A HOLE IN MY HEAD TO RELEASE THE DEMON THEN ELECTRECUTE ME!KEEP UP THE ECLECTICLY ECCENTRIC WORK YOUR GREAT.


  • Amber Lee
    May 29, 2007
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    Great write!I love it!

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