In the fall
I fall
Like leaves
I fall
Like raindrops
I fall
Like temperature
I fall
Like evening shadows fall
I fall
I fall
In love…
A contest entry
- One Day: Real Love by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended June 27, 2007, 26 entries
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Comments
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Nicely crafted, I love the imagery of nature and how you related it with your own feelings.Good work and thank you for entering.
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This is a really good write. Thank you for entering it in my contest. Best of luck!
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Yes:
Fall, in particular October, had always been a deadly time for me, leaving me vulnerable to whatever romance was in the air. But then I moved to Alaska where the weather crammed October up its ass and pulled out a fudgesickle. After that I moved to Hawaii, and October turned into cooler sand and higher waves, no longer a midwestern October at all. I won't even bring up the subject of my dick or my heart. Sad. Any rate thanks for the write, sorry I digressed. Dave -
well, this write must give you jouissance, because you've entered it in so many contests!
it's cute -
Simple, but meaningful. Very expressive. Comveys deep meaning in simple words. Thanks for entering!
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Very simple and expressive...nice...thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika!
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not a badwrite but not really what im looking for in this contest. i like the poem but its not doing anything for me inspiration-wise. thank you for sharing it with me.
Rob -
this is the first time that i've read repitition that didn't get annoying. like the person stated before me, it's kind of like a chant. i like the imagery in this. i liked the ending a lot. thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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nicely done! I really like
the flow of this one, the repetition, like a chant...
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Thank you so much for your entry. Very succint and to the point, and there's something to value in that. It's a little more Love-at-first-sight than I was looking for. I'd love to see a little more meat to this that makes it gritty and real and honest. Sometimes, love has to be both sad and happy. There's a nice balance that exists in most relationships But I really did enjoy this one as it is.
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Very pretty. I like the repetetion and word choice. =] Very good!
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I love this! Very nice use of movement. Great job.
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