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The End Of Time

There is no light and joy in death
no colors, rainbows, forest or trees
laughter to hear, sweet fragrance to smell
notes to write or music to listen.

The garden of eden in all it's beauty
paradise, heaven and faith
are like hope, wishes and dreams
not possible, in death they don't exist.

There is no darkness or sorrow in death
no misery, agony, hurt or pain
crying, screaming, starving masses to feed
depression, weakness and loss to suffer within.

The fiery pits of purgatory in all it's inferno
subtropics, hell fire and brimstone
are like torture, agony and nightmares
not possible, in death they don't exist.

We find evil in darkness in the light of life
with light we find direction, hope, faith, virtue and God
in darkness we covet the unguided, wicked, sin and the devil
light and darkness are not possible, in death they don't exist.

I am the ice to the devils fire
with me comes the end to the sick and dying
hope, faith, living, hell and heaven
the souls of the dead and souls of the living.

I take the warmth of day and halo's of angels
the cold of night, the horns of the devil
with me comes the unfathomable end
where nothing is possible and life and death don't exist.

Light and dark will have no place or meaning
sucking life's breath from the universe,

I will end all life and death and all things between
I am the end of time where there is no time.

I am unstoppable
all consuming
an empty void
the end of the end.


I am the Black Hole

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I don't have much experience writing dark poetry this is the best I could come up with

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  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    December 11, 2008

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    I am unstoppable
    all consuming
    an empty void
    the end of the end.

    Nice write here. I think you pulled this off nicely.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • LadyDementia gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    Nice personification, not seen this theme in dark before. For a beginner it is very good, my first was dire A very neat read, Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Girl Mad As Birds
    October 25, 2008

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    Powerful piece. I like the way you consider all the possibilies of life after death and deny them all. It's both fascinating and terrifying.

    Thank you for entering!


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    Very dark indeed. Appropriate for the prompt. THanks for entering and best wishes,


  • abyssalchainsaw
    May 16, 2008

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    Dark and very good your trophy was much deserved,Very nice imagery and portrayed the hopelessness well along with it.

  • Deadmans Heart
    May 2, 2008
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    I saw no question and find no answer

    And yet I find myself questioning; myself, you, this poem, poetry, life, my choices, all choices, and existence in general. wise use of a prewrite


  • sleepingINblackRain
    March 26, 2008

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    interesting

    I'm not sure how a black hole is the meaning of life, but leading there was very descriptive and gave opinion towards lack of meaning

    Thanks for entering this was interesting(in a good way)


  • Mezclita
    March 25, 2008

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    Hey there! It's you again... what a pleasant surprise ^^ I entered one of my "meaning of life" pieces for this one too... still remember my contest long ago? If I had hosted it now I might have given you an HM or something (at least) but, I was too hopeless back then and this view was just a little dry to swallow... I haven't exactly changed any of my beliefs... for I don't, I simply believe in life... like in that one poem I had given Gold out to called "Because"... anyhow, good luck in this one!

    TC<3 Alex


  • TrixieOne
    March 24, 2008

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    Congrats on gold...very much deserved. I'm interested to see what other contests you win with this piece. Thanks so much for entering.

  • TrixieOne
    March 11, 2008
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    I love this piece! Beautiful dark imagery, interesting point of view, and I like the repition. Drives the finality home. One of my favorites.
    Thanks for the entry. Best of luck in the contest.


  • aslanlight
    December 30, 2007

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    Powerful stuff!

    Love the last person's comment and wow I agree; you can really do some damage with that pen without the practise! This is quite disturbing and yet written in such a matter of fact manner as though it's pressumed certainty. For a reader without spirituality that might be possible. A unique stance of writing from the point of view of the Black Hole; I like that!

    Peace Georgia


  • crimsondew
    December 16, 2007

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    Wow

    I fear what you would do when you gain experience in writing dark poetry...lol..Very well written, a variety of feelings surge on reading this....
    All the best!


  • Griswold gold member
    November 13, 2007

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    An interesting write to try to describe nothing... very nicely done best of luck to you in this contest...Scott


  • Aura of night
    November 10, 2007
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    Amazing

    You can't describe nothingness..without it blowing your mind. It's another world..another way you would have to percieve..your stuck. You made this a big point in your story and I love the description in this. I did not have a hard time envisioning this..it actually gave me a knot in my stomach for a minute lol. I enjoyed this.


  • DancingRed
    September 20, 2007

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    I like this line - 'sucking life's breath from the universe'. A powerful image of the end of the world.

    I'm partial to want a shorter piece - I think it could have been more succinct and more powerful that way. Also, as you're not rhyme perhaps it could have been left-aligned and structured differently.

    The ending made me smile - 'I am the Black Hole' - it's fairly simply put, but a good round ending to this dark piece.

    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    August 31, 2007

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    Ummm... pain, screaming.. to be quite fucking blunt.. do exist in death. Suffering too. Do you think that women that are raped to death dont feel pain? Suffering? Torture? Are you so ignorant to think that there is none of this in death? More often than not is there pain in death, in one form or another.. and for more than the one person dieing. This poem seemed completely ignorant and even in some parts, contradictory. I noticed you said you dont have much experience with dark poetry. I will politely say this much, I agree.. and maybe it isnt for you. I am sure, that even in a black hole, pain exists in death. To be vacuumed into oblivion.. imagine all of your muscles wripping at once, every bones crushing and crumbling to dust.. your flesh shredding into a million pieces.. that would be very painful. Thanks for entering... but really.. come on.


    • Roaddog Wolf
      August 31, 2007
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      critiquing someones write

      Does not mean not to be critical and your opinion is appreciated , however perhaps you could learn to do so without being insulting. What makes you the expert on what is felt after death and what isn't you have never been dead and how do you know what exist in the realm of the black hole, no one does. as far as writing dark poetry I don't have much experience its not my thing but I enjoy learning or is that ignorant as well?

      • DancingShadowCorpse
        September 3, 2007
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        im not saying what is felt after death... I am saying that there is pain in death. I dont have the slightest clue what happens after you actually die. A black hole is a vacuum in space. Most often occuring when a star explodes, because space has no gravity the remains of the star all implode and create a black hole.. a vacuum. Look it up on wikipedia or something. IM sure you can find it somewhere.. after all.. you learn about that crap in science before you even hit highschool.

        And, to be quite honest, the only time I can ever possibly see that there is no pain in death is when someone truely wants to die. Naturally, all living creatures.. as animal or human being, will fight to live and will be scared or enraged when their life is in danger. And right next door to that fear or anger or both, is pain.. not wanting to die. Unless someone dies in there sleep, dies 100% instantly, or sincerely wants to die.. there is pain in death.

  • Bob Fox
    August 11, 2007
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    The Finality

    Could be as you say. After all who really knows. I myself have other Ideas.. bUt perhaps it is the Black Hole... Drink up & have fun

  • Mezclita
    July 31, 2007
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    Logically structured.... I like your perspective. At first it seems almost hopeless but by the time you get to the "we find..." evil stanza, you realize it's in fact a neutral take!

    It's also nice that the last time you don't actually say again the exact words "in death they don't exist"... it would have been overdone by then (instead you do "...and life and death don't exist"^^).

    There is however one thing... I understand that you might have wanted to surprise the reader when you started changing the beginning of the phrases into "I...", but what it did for me was totally break the flow! I felt as if it was the start of another completely different poem almost (you could have maybe hinted somewhere earlier on that you were writing from the view of this Black Hole) It hardly takes away from the entire poem though because this one really is a neat write

    Btw, first learned & did a report on the black hole in the third grade... fascinating things they sure are~

    Thank u 4 entering!

  • Bob Fox
    July 11, 2007

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    The Black Hole

    Something the frightens even scientist. What really is there after the black hole, nothing? But religion teaches a whole nother idea. Proving that the two do not mix. Very interesting thoughts here


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 8, 2007

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    Dark indeed, deep insight...visuals impending doom felt...does not matter the experience one has, its what their soul speaks to them and tells them...Keep penning my friend!


  • FallenAngel09
    June 4, 2007

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    I'm not sure if this is a prophecy or simply telling me in infinite detail about the morbidity of death, please get back to me and tell me how this ties in with my contest. Thanks for entering and good luck

    Tiphanie


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    May 31, 2007
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    very intense... it kinda made me think too... good job and thanks for entering my contest... ^-^


  • ButterflyforChrist
    May 29, 2007

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    Wow!

    This is intense. It's left me speechless. Different from what I've read before, but your writing never seizes to amaze me. This is wonderful. =) Great job for mostly taking a stab at dark poetry! =)

    • Roaddog Wolf
      May 29, 2007
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      thank you duckie

      I was concerned writing this one because I was worried you might wonder if I had gone astray lol had to write something dark and I didn't know for sure what that was.
      thanks

      • ButterflyforChrist
        May 29, 2007
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        Hmm.... well, one, it's your poetry, two, sometimes we all need to write dark, depressing, or out of norm poetry, I have, and three, don't worry about my opinion. in all actuality, mine doesn't matter one iota. Write from your heart, Dave... And if it's something you feel God wouldnt want you to share..don't share it...But if you need to let it out, let it out, dont keep it in. Sometimes...I write poems to God of things that I feel upon my heart, that I don't share, but need to let out. He understands these feelings more than anyone else. =)

        You are most welcome


  • Foxydaze14
    May 28, 2007

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    I like that it's fresh. By reading this I couldn't tell that you don't have much experience with dark poems becuase you wrote this one so well. It is intense and a great piece. I give it a 9 out of 10


  • Angel w o Wings
    May 28, 2007

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    Wow........that was intence! Very good writing in all respects. Thank you for sharing this with us all. I will read more of your poetry.

    David


  • poetryality silver member
    May 28, 2007

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    This appears to be "blank verse". It has meter but no rhyme. The content is a bit overwhelming. It tends to dispel what many have as their concept of death (and life). You have written a poem that tests thought. There is great intensity scribed here poet. I found myself stopping at intervals to question what was written. I had to re-read the poem to pull myself from the dark void it created. Then I read the author's comments and thought; THEY MUST BE KIDDING! Very well crafted. I wish you well in all you wish to conquer.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • yellowrose190
    May 28, 2007
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    Intense

    Really intense poem.

    I like your style of writing.
    It was a really deep poem.

    For me it was little difficult to to read the first time but it really caught my attention so I read it again.

    Over all it was a Beautiful poem. I enjoyed it a lot. I like poems on the subject, the end of the world.

    Very well written and deep poem.

    Susan


  • Poetic Rage
    May 28, 2007

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    Grabbed Me

    WOW,You took me from the first word and threw me in this Black Hole of yours.



    You totally grabbed this and spilled you emotions into it like a waterfall into a river....

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