I got a big bag of jellybeans to eat
From that old candy store, my special treat -
But to my bewilderment and surprise,
The jellybean was dancing before my eyes!
He was doing the twist and the jerk, too,
And everything jellybeans just should NOT do!
He waggled his tongue and pulled lots of faces,
And bit me in lots of unwelcome places!
I thought, I think this is backwards, you see,
I should eat jellybeans - not let them eat me!
So I swallowed him up and he began to fuss
And he jiggled inside my esophagus.
I started dancing, and people would stare;
I banged my fists and yelled “this isn’t fair!”
I coughed him up with a lot of goo,
And I finally flushed him right down the loo.
I was glad to get rid of that terrible pest
So I could flop on the couch and get some rest;
But I know in the sewer he’s still going strong,
Annoying the rats from dusk until dawn.
Now, I’m begging my pardon for being so rude,
But it just isn’t right to have dancing food.
Author notes
fur elise, age 11
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under Only ~ Pick a Title and Roll With it 2 by Amunet Wolfbane.
450 points, ended June 14, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
AAGGHH I KEEP WRITING ABOUT JELLYBEANS
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AMAZING
That is amazing. I love this poem. I really really do. It's so original and fun. COOL! xox -
LMAO
This is just wonderful! The rhyme and the flow are great! The story you have created here to bring us all some wonderful laughter is grand. You truly have a talent for writing humorous pieces of poetry. Awesome Job!
Blessings
celticmoon
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Score: 82
As per requested of the rules, none of the judges will strain to read illegible fonts/backgrounds; will recommend changing the color for better scoring -
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I fixed the background - thank you for the suggestion! The background was a little hard to read...I was just trying to make it colorful.
lise
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yes, I think it is slightly strange how you write about jellybeans a lot, like ducks and classical music. they just don't go together, but somehow it keeps popping up. i just have to say it is kind of random and unexpected at times, but don't worry, that's what I love about it!
love from sasha -
I thought it was hilarious. The rhythms were steady and I think the rhyme pattern helped tell the story that much better. Thank you so much for sharing. I hope you keep writing. =)
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lol, this was good, this was really good, i mean i like this pome you did a great job, it made me laugh, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Cute
cute poem. I liked it. I like your title too...it really catches you attention. -
Sorry kid me personaly I didn't like it but to make better you should say the jelly beans transformed into a beast a beast who could do the Macerana that would pretty funny if you did that try it.
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